Don't Change Me

It's how I feel about...

You should be more creative
Instead of being calculative
You're no longer attractive
Now I know you're manipulative

 

Don't change me to suit you
Mold me into someone you could rule
I'm trying hard to love you
You're playing smart but I'm not sure

 

I'm a bird with a broken wing
Desperately in need of nursing and caring
I know I should thank you for everything
But you said things that are confusing

 

Please love me unconditionally
Let me choose to stay or go cautiously
Don't try to change me totally
If you want me to be with you willingly

 

[2006-08-10]

Reviews

[David M Pitchford]

It's a hard sell to rhyme such lines. Bravo. It was pushing the envelope in the first stanze to have 'uber-feminine' rhymes. Changing to masculine in the second stanza mitigated that, broke it up and upped the tempo. The sprung rhyme of "sure" in the fourth line, second stanza is billiant in its demonstration of being uncertain - enactive of the language. Bravo! Very interesting blend of fem/masc rhyme from there on. Very interesting, indeed. Again, this is straightforward communication. One wonders if the narrative persona is speaking internally or otherwise - whether this is a self-composed person speaking to avoid misunderstanding, or whether a woman maltreated and building toward such effusive advice to the offending party.
Thanks for sharing.
David

[Michael X]

Revealing emotions as if opening the heart like an open book..pages caught by any breeze
that comes its way..feeling crossed- taking life as its come.. searching for things the heart
used to know and love.. that made the soul feel alive..pondering reasons for change
in the throes of need.. baring for a reason to remain the same.. sometimes its best to
take things as they come.. this is absolutely subtly powerful and surrendered with justification
excellent job..speaks on many levels.. you have a way with imagery and passion

"I'm a bird with a broken wing
Desperately in need of nursing and caring
I know I should thank you for everything
But you said things that are confusing