Wood Fight

   They kept hearing other noises in the woods. Sometimes they would see a bird or chipmunk here or there. But then something attacked them and it was another wolf, this one was going to kill us. She had her grandpa’s knife and pulled it out. She was going to throw it at the wolf, but Jacob shook his head. She lowered the knife and let Jacob deal with the wolf. They started fighting each other and then it stopped because the animals in the woods came.

                    The animals in the woods came to watch the fight and Alex felt like their eyes were on her. Jacob looked back at her with worry on his face and she nodded to reassure him that she was okay. He turned back to the fight and the fight continued. She was attacked by a wolf and she cut him with the knife. The wolf yelped in pain, scratched her face and she yelled in pain. Jacob heard her and clawed the wolf he was fighting in the face and ran to her. She stumbled away from the wolf and fell on the ground.

                      She could not see through her left eye because of the wolf . When it went to attack her, it clawed her eye and now she could not see. She stood up and saw Jacob was fighting the wolf that made her blind in her left eye. He was attacking it over and over, but it was not moving, and was about to attack it again when she called out to him. She said, “Jacob, stop, he's dead.” He looked at her and ran to her, turning back to a human while running. He picked her up in a hug and was crying.

Author's Note

this story it bad, idk why I keep posting it

Reviews

[Eliza1066]

Your story is not bad Marie! You've a great story idea here and I hope you develop it. The chapters until this point need 'tidying' up, and improving here and there, with attention to grammar etc., but then making a review is about your story and nothing else. I've given you 90. I'm not sure which young person's genre it would fit into, but it is showing a great deal of promise, and the kind of story I used to read as a child/young teenager. I hope you continue with it, and I shall review the next chapter too.

[Marie Kinnett]

Thank you I try to make the best of this story.

[BananaBellPepper]

I like the story but there are some repetitive aspects like yelling in pain and the words "fight" or "attack" are used a lot in. Maybe use more synonyms? The story is peak tho, pls don't stop posting it :D

[Marie Kinnett]

Thank you bananabellpepper, I'll see what I can do about the repetitive parts

[Michael Sun Bear]

Marie, you are a scary girl!

[Marie Kinnett]

Uhm, thanks I guess. Started writing this when I was nine