The Missing - Space 1

The Missing

 

In this space, we live

unable to touch

or see the heart

of another.

Try to reach out

and within seconds

your body and space

they’ll incinerate.

The bubble,

in which you

existed will

evaporate;

Leaving no trace

of your existence.

 

The space,

confined within

the bubble,

seamlessly

merges with

outer emptiness;

As if it was never

there, a distinct

separate entity.

The space

that was you.

Only those,

who themselves

yearn

to reach beyond

their bubble,

to escape

lonely confinement

- Only they

notice the missing

March 2015

Author's Note

constructive criticism is welcome

Reviews

[James O'Rourke]

Interesting piece Mai.

Independently we do what we please, so long as our bubbles remain intact. Once we reach outside it, that very bubble will cease to be. The advantage of the bubble is that we are safe from outside interventions on our mind and actions. However, that may be the very disadvantage. Without the bubble we leave ourselves open to new experiences and perspectives. And only then do we realize (and perhaps see) the bubbles of others and recognize that our own bubble has gone missing.

An interesting piece that upon multiple reads, still drum up thoughts and questions to inquisitive minds. Thanks for sharing this and I hope that I will get some stuff written to share with you as well! - James

[Mayank]

There are things that you read, reread and keep reading because every time you do so, you find new meaning in words and that's what make this poem special.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for your kind review, Mayank! I appreciate you reading it - and rereading it :)

[Bear]

Metaphysically empowering, quiddity of life is the essence confined inside our own bubble, deep thinking from a deep poem. Thank you for posting this, it is spectacular.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you, Bear. I appreciate your kind review - and also the suggestions you sent me! Still have not had the time to make up my mind - regardless I am thankful :)

[Sami Khalil]

You really reach beyond in this wonderful spacial write. No escape from its beauty...:)..............

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you, Sami. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment :)

[emmajoy]

'The space, - confined within the bubble, - seamlessly merges with outer emptiness;.. '

Glorious ever-present space empties and fills at will, but we mini mortals just walk blindly thought it, treading carelessly, rarely looking forward or back. And at times are near to bursting that bubble.

We waste its mystery, its gift. Sad. Your writing is worth far more than a narrow box..

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you, Emma. For reading and commenting! I appreciate it :)

[emmajoy]

Smiling as i add an 'oops'. Meant to type 'through' not thought' . Will now go sit on the naughty step. :)

[Mai L Nissen]

Worse things happen at sea... :)

[nazia]

As always this is again a thought provoking piece of work. Its so good to read your work again :) How have you been??

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you, Nazia! Been really busy, too stressed out and fatigued to be active in here for a while, however, it is nice being in here again :) How have you been?

[nazia]

Busy with a project that is bound to fail :p lol
Its been days since I last wrote.. Still its good to read and absorb something new :)

[Mai L Nissen]

Haven't really been writing for months... except editing the 3 poems from March. Well, if your project is related to writing, you usually come through quite on top :)

[nazia]

Thanks :)... I hope the project coordinator thinks the same way. :D

[hanir]

"The space,
confined within
the bubble,
seamlessly
merges with
outer emptiness.."
I know this void..It's exactly the same thing slowly killing me...eating every ounch of my flesh!
Creatively written! 😊

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for reading and commenting! It is much appreciated :)

[Lyingwithlions]

Very beautiful and containing so much truth, loved it! :)

Thank you for sharing this piece.

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! :)

[Mai L Nissen]

I appreciate it :)

[Jamestown]

I really enjoyed this piece, the title is perfect for what you are
touching on, I can definitely identify with the message, thanks for
sharing and b-blessed!

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for reading, I am glad you liked it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

The world seem colder to me. Rare deep and true conversations.
"In this space, we live
unable to touch
or see the heart
of another."
The above lines were my favorite. They could stand alone. We can be ghost with-in a work place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! I am glad you liked it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I always enjoy your work. You are one of my favorite.

[Mai L Nissen]

Wow, thank you!