The Window

I have never entered anything in WritersCafe before, so here goes. (:

Window.

If all of us were like windows,
people would see through our body,
and understand our emotions.

A window is what let something in,
and also to let it out.

We all need to be more open,
I once said to myself.
We need to be like windows.

Reviews

[Fabian Franco]

Interesting way to think.
Good job it was nice. :)

[Liz]

This is nice. A very good thought. This is nicely written, I think. Nice job!

[vincentbals]

interesting thought ... i like it!

good job. thanks;

[JC]

beautiful work and analogy.

[J.S. Pua]

yes..
a logical piece..
good work..

[Coyote Poetry]

The logic in your words is very good. We allow few people into our life because the windows are closed to the very few. A well written poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sasha]

This is really good for a first submission. I appreciate the sentiment behind it and agree that people should be more open. You used the metaphor well and though the piece is short, it sufficiently gets your point across.