a lovely thing

It would be so

 

lovely if you kissed me hard

right after

 I told you 

I wasn’t good for you.

Reviews

[bob, small b. aka invs]

this is the kind of thought that should be transmitted across a woman's brow so a man can read it as it occurs. we are not insensitive, just generally clueless. wonderful writing. short and direct. i need to read more of your stuff.

[paddy d daly]

nice idea and I get the sentiment, but would it work, ??? not so sure!!!

[alltheloveabove]

I'm confused with the tenses... it would be... I told? Nice idea though

[Jack...]

Yep, this one was fun. Very cool my friend.

[Layne]

The stanza is very nicely constructed and a very powerful one at that.

[C. Jayne Johnson]

Very nicely constructed. It awakened a desire I didn't knew I had.

[Addie Santos]

Go out of the house and kiss your man right now.

[C. Jayne Johnson]

I didn't know I had* :P

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice vision create by your words. What is not good for us. Tempts us the most. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tom Lumsden]

A kiss, a sign,an affirmation after words of self-digrination would be lovely as a sign she was good or wasn't. A Zen koan expressed in haiku. 10

[Addie Santos]

An affirmation that some girls do not just get. Thanks xo