Better get more

just playing with words

Better get more

junk costs less then fruit

powerful economic forces

crushing the poor

the dollar store

 

It's all in degrees

disease

till we notice

the oily ring

round the swimming pool

 

Stupid tools

some rictus symphony

my agony

draining more from me

melting into purple sunsets

 

Reviews

[A.r. Bazian]

i like it very much!
an unusual rhyme scheme... the pattern is appealing!
the idea is important and its presentation is very good!
the structure is well held and flowing nicely!

in other words! i like!

[justjenn_2u]

Isn't this poem the ironic truth! We, as humans, created this senseless cost on the dollar.

Nice rhyme flow and unique idea!

Thoroughly enjoyed.

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Keep playing! The words don't flow for me. I liked the last stanza but the rest just didn't seem to go with the poem.

[Too Me]

This is so well written and speaks with strenght! ~ Lana