Lifeless (Poem/Story)

A Poem by Mr.Writer

I run straight into an alley

My heart pounding, whilst beads of sweat trickle down my tomato-red cheeks

While running, I quickly turn around to find the transparent souls almost facing me

I gasp and fall down to the ground, my hands covering my eyes, blocking the hot tears spurting out from them

I feel myself vibrating

All the energy and strength draining from my soul

My emotions being transferred to the horrifying beasts

I let out one last yelp before getting sucked away

© 2017 Mr.Writer

Author's Note

This is dedicated to the dementors in Harry potter :)

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Coyote Poetry

A wild ride in the words. You described final place and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Coyote! I really appreciate it :) I tried to make this a bit spooky and as you sai.. read more

8 Years Ago

Death is always spooky and you are welcome my friend.

Farhan Shaikh

Very well penned and very interesting to read

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much!! :)

Surya

Before getting sucked away....yeah, it must be done...haha..and I enjoyes the imagery here...good one..:)

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Lol :D Thank you!!

writ rajat

I like this one soon muxh

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

thank you!! :)

matrixmark

Never read any of the Harry Potter books BUT this is a seriously cool piece. Very vivid and rich in imagery. Its what amazes me about poets - to create so much image in such a short piece is beyond me. I can't do that - I have to write a book....lol

Great piece Shaan. My minds eye was working well with this one.

Mark.

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Oh God are Shaan and me the only ones here to have read Harry Potter? 😎😎😎 you too, Mark! Wh.. read more

8 Years Ago

My books are a tad more graphic than a Mr Potter read. But I do beleived they are good ro read.
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8 Years Ago

Of course! They are very...original 😉😂

8 Years Ago

That they are ;-)

Mark.

8 Years Ago

As is yours, Mark 😊

8 Years Ago

Sure is :-)

Mark

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much Mark!! :) I really appreciate the review :) And yeah... you should read Harry Pott.. read more

8 Years Ago

Maybe one day I will read all about Mr Potter, in the meantime I will stick with the crazy books I d.. read more

8 Years Ago

No problem :) I`m deciding to write a new piece and need an idea, have any ideas Mark, yumna :)

8 Years Ago

OK. heres something different - how about a piece about yourself.

Mark.

8 Years Ago

Hmm, that seems like a nice idea! :) Thanks! I actually haven`t written anything about myself.
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8 Years Ago

Nothingness? 😉

8 Years Ago

Lol thanks Yumna ;D

8 Years Ago

Or both!

Mark.

8 Years Ago

Hmm, I`ll try and see :)

8 Years Ago

See, everybody can write about themselves, but nothingness.. It's a unique idea haha 😉😛

8 Years Ago

Lol true :D Tbh, I didn`t know the meaning of nothingness :D I just found it out and I can relate to.. read more

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8 Years Ago

Looking forward to it.
Hope its the nothingness one...lol

Mark.

8 Years Ago

Well good for me then 😊
I look forward to it too 😉

8 Years Ago

It's ready :D

CAPOLAVORO

Hah! I am so sure they would be proud of your piece. :) This one has a good imagery. ;)

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

Thank you!! :)

Tina H.W.

I've never watched or read Harry Potter but I still thought this was really good! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago

8 Years Ago

I can't believe it!! You haven't read? 😶😶😶
You're probably one of a million haha �.. read more

8 Years Ago

Lol :D Yumna Stop teasing Tina :D Thanks Tina ;D

8 Years Ago

O o was I? Lol 😛

8 Years Ago

xD I dont know, were you xD

8 Years Ago

You always assume the worse (about me) 😎😎 😂

8 Years Ago

I`m sorry ;D

8 Years Ago

Hahaha you're sorry with a ;D 😎 doesn't seem as if you are lol I'm kidding 😉😛

8 Years Ago

Lol, I`ll make the correction, :D, there lol

8 Years Ago

All the more worse haha 😎😎😎

8 Years Ago

Umm...I feel like I should bow my head in shame here. *says quietly with a tear in eye* I'm sorry fo.. read more

8 Years Ago

Seriously? Not even one movie of Star Wars? :O :O

8 Years Ago

Hmm...there was a time I watched it behind my eyelids and then I don't remember much of it...

8 Years Ago

Oh come on! It ain't scary 😛😛

8 Years Ago

Nope. I meant boring...........hahaha :P

8 Years Ago

Umm did you find Twilight Saga interesting? 😂😎

8 Years Ago

If I said "what's Twilight" would that answer your question...? ;P

8 Years Ago

Ack ack tell me a movie which you have seen, Tina! There must be one 😎😎

8 Years Ago

Haha sure! Love Misery, Saw (the first), Silence of the Lambs...and yah...so on. I'm a HUGE fan of p.. read more

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8 Years Ago

*sigh of relief* phew! Good!
But musicals? La la land?

8 Years Ago

La La Land, of course! :D Phantom of the Opera; Singin' In The Rain; Les Mis, My Fair Lady... :)

8 Years Ago

Okay lol I've just seen the first, will have to check the rest 😛😛

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Added on April 7, 2017
Last Updated on April 7, 2017

Author

Mr.Writer

Toronto, Ontario, Canada

About

First of all... I love to write! It has always been my passion to write since... last year! :D I can easily pour my emotions in writing without telling them to anyone. I love to review people's work.. more..