Welcome (Poem)

My hearts pounding

My hands are trembling

White light beams right at my face, forcing me to continuously twitch

I try to move but the searing pain in my stomach stops me

I take deep breaths, but they aren`t deep enough

It`s as if I`m in a ocean, struggling to swim and stay alive.

I groan as a scalpel cuts right through my stomach

Please kill me... 

My finger nails cut through the bed-sheets 

Sweat drenches the whole bed

Soon, a tiny baby comes out

He wails and wails!

I sigh in relief, as I finally pass the difficult part 

As soon as he stops wailing, his marble eyes look at me.

They`re as delicate as a diamond

I pass a kiss on his cheek

``Welcome baby Ahmed, my radiant and celestial child.``

 

Reviews

[heartspeaks]

Oh my God! this literally made my jaw drop ! Oh dear... i was consumed by this poem... I din't expect it to be so beautiful... atleast not at all related to a mother...... The words are so apt.. The flow of poem is amazing... It intrigued me to read further and does build up a suspense... I don't know if i am correct in saying this but till how much ever i have read , This is your best work and definitely going in my library.... Hats off.... I don't have more adjectives to praise this work... Simply KUDOS!

[Tony Jordan]

Everyone has a mother and surely can relate to this. (Do test tube babies have mothers...hmmm...?)
Sweet.
I'm really watching you now...lmao
:)

[Mr.Writer]

Lol :D Thank you so much Tony!! :) Well, don`t forget, I`m also watching you ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Haha - well I've had two eyes tatooed into the back of my head so ...lol

[Mr.Writer]

Ohh shoot! Better be careful then ;)

[Tony Jordan]

Yup :)
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[Tina H.W.]

Aw, this is lovely! I did think at first it was a horror story but you surprised me (again :))
I really like the description throughout and that very touching part about the baby's eyes. Lovely :)

[Mr.Writer]

Awe thank you so much Tina!! :)

[Tina H.W.]

You are so welcome, Shaan :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing journey leading to very good ending.
"They`re as delicate as a diamond
I pass a kiss on his cheek
``Welcome baby Ahmed, my radiant and celestial child.``"
The above lines sensitive, tasteful and perfect. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!! :) I really appreciate it :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Zoya]

Woah! This is seriously wondrous. Something new that I've come across. All the descriptions are wonderful and all the lines beautifully formed. Really great work!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Zoe! I really appreciate it :)

[Zoya]

you're welcome!

[matrixmark]

To me, this was like WOW! very vividly impresssive. I really am at a loss for more words.

Sorry the review is short BUT I really don't know what else to say.

Great piece Shaan.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Mark! :) I`m really glad you enjoyed!

[matrixmark]

Thank you for sharing.


Mark.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"It's as if I'm in a ocean, struggling to swim and stay alive"

You portrayed this really well. There is no end to how a mother bears the pain and loves her child.
Nicely penned :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Yumna! :) You`re right, mothers love is special

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, Shaan. 😊

[Farhan Shaikh]

Awesome, loved it Shaan really good one

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Farhan! :)

[Surya]

Mother's rite...no words for their pain and their gratitude...just loved it...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Surya!!! :) I really appreciate it