I don't have much time, but I want to tell you some things
They're super important and you need to know them or else you'll end up believing the wrong people
And trust me, you won't want that to happen... cause I've been in that boat and faced the consequences to it, and all I can tell you is that it's horrible, and by horrible... I mean hell.
I'm sorry though... the things I want to tell you, they won't make any sense right now, because you don't know the story...
you literally know nothing, which is what upsets me the most...
This is why you'll be reading a story. A story filled with different emotions and different perspectives.
But the question is... which ones are telling the truth? And which ones aren't?
And there's an actual problem that ties in to all of those things, which I can't tell and will recommend to you that you read the story.
I know that you're like "What in the hell is going on?" or "I'm really confused"
As I said... trust me and you'll be going on the straight path, but it'll be hard to stay on it, as you're a human being and may be tricked.
And that's why I'm asking you to hold on to my hand, and get ready to be welcomed as a guest to this story.
But if you won't hold on, then all I have left to say is...
"Good luck and F**K YOU."
Oh and if you want to know who I am... by all means know so.
So I typically avoid "stories" on this site like the Plague, but as I had nothing going on at the moment I decided to give it a read, I gotta say it's rpetty interesting and quite clever. A wonderful opening to what I'm hoping will be a great story.
Okay this struck an interest in me.
I don't usually like when narrators speak to the readers, but the way you did it was very well done, and the twist that we were actually talking to the Killer did hit me by surprise.
I like your style, and will contuine this for sure.
I do not even like short stories that much... This had my attention, f**k you and all... I shall perhaps read more in the future, if it is as well written and engaging as this... Well penned...
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much silente! I really hope the book goes well
With your ability to breathe life into seemingly dull and bland words... I have no doubt in my mind,.. read moreWith your ability to breathe life into seemingly dull and bland words... I have no doubt in my mind, you and said book will brilliantly succeed...
8 Years Ago
Aww thanks so much silente! :)
I really appreciate it
8 Years Ago
And I really enjoyed it, you are most welcome, friend...
Well well.. This is going to be a very interesting piece. You've managed to give that curiosity out in a sarcastic way.! Even now I have tons of questions and I'm looking forward to this to find answers.! At this moment I'm like " WTF is this? Who the hell is this killer thing and why the hell he thinks that we'd believe a killer? " ;)
Lol thank you! I know right... it's pretty confusing for the readers at the moment, but trust me, st.. read moreLol thank you! I know right... it's pretty confusing for the readers at the moment, but trust me, stick with this story and you'll find all the answers to your question... :)
8 Years Ago
Yeah I will..for sure.. Waiting for it.! Come up with a great work.!
Well I wish I could say the same but since I'm not a killer so I'll patiently wait for the starting chapter 😊😉
Btw, I stand by what Mark says : it may not be the killer speaking 😛
You really punched the reader in the face in your last lines and I did say wtf 😂😂
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you so much Yumna!! :)
Well now some reactions are coming up, which I'm glad of :D read moreThank you so much Yumna!! :)
Well now some reactions are coming up, which I'm glad of :D
The first chapter will come on Friday hopefully, lol sorry for the long wait :P
* Yumna Kay punches me in the face
8 Years Ago
Hahah yeah I should be doing that 😛😂
You're welcome, Shaan! Looking forward to reading.. read moreHahah yeah I should be doing that 😛😂
You're welcome, Shaan! Looking forward to reading more 😊
8 Years Ago
Lol yep :D
I just have a quick question :)
I'm a bit confused when you said that you w.. read moreLol yep :D
I just have a quick question :)
I'm a bit confused when you said that you wish you could say the same, lol sorry, kinda didn't understand that tbh
8 Years Ago
Like when mark mentioned "sore thumb" I got a bit confused xD I thought what? So I searched it up read moreLike when mark mentioned "sore thumb" I got a bit confused xD I thought what? So I searched it up
Sorry Mark ;P
Hahaha I meant I wanted to say what the killer said 'good luck and..' the rest you know 😛😂😂.. read moreHahaha I meant I wanted to say what the killer said 'good luck and..' the rest you know 😛😂😂😂
I know Anastasia :)
I also really like your writing, and I often use it as a guide as well w.. read moreI know Anastasia :)
I also really like your writing, and I often use it as a guide as well with others poems as well and I'm being honest :)
I liked it. A good introduction.
But the question is....why trust anything that a killer says.
This line stood out like a sore thumb -' And there's an actual problem that ties in to all of those things' - and it spelled out to me - Misdirection.
Good piece Shaan.
Mark.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you Mark!! :)
I appreciate the feedback and review
First of all... I love to write! It has always been my passion to write since... last year! :D I can easily pour my emotions in writing without telling them to anyone.
I love to review people's work.. more..