Lonely Story/Poem

Reality based piece...

Nobody likes you...

Why do you think that?

You're a p***y

What does that mean?

Wanna be friends? Kill yourself

You're taking away my only hope to live...

Worthless and used piece of garbage

Please stop...

If this was the hunger games, you'd be my first target.

What did I do to you?

Have your parents ever told you that you're a mistake?

I'm a mistake, you're right

Why won't you just die!

Don't worry... I will

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

powerful..and that ending...yes, sooner or later...but when treated like this, for some it is much sooner than meant to be---
as emily dickinson said.."words have the power to heal but also the power to kill"----

j.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Jacob!
I agree with you to the fullest :)

[Kesha]

Oh what harsh words to have to hear! Very heartbreaking but a nice piece!

[Mr.Writer]

I know :( Thank you Kesha! :)
I checked out the collaboration piece you guys made and it was absolute fab!
Very creative and well done :)

[Kesha]

You are welcome!
And thank you very much Shaan! Glad you liked it!

[CAPOLAVORO]

Words are like swords. It does cut you through sometimes. These words are truly reality based issue. Nice piece.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!! :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Well yes ... perfectly logical. I thought you dealt with the onslaught very well. You must give me some tips! Very good reality based piece!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)

[Stacy Purvis]

You better cut that out! Lovely piece full of passion illustrating a bully mentality, verbal and mental abuse.
I sincerely hope this isn't happening to you, personally...
Thank you for sharing an exploration on abuse. xxx

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)

[matrixmark]

Few words, but most certainly a powerful piece.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Mark! :)

[matrixmark]

I only wish it was longer so that I could be more expressive.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Yeah, I felt like it could be longer :)
Thank you for feedback Mark :)

[matrixmark]

No problem. Keep doing what you are doing as you're good at it.

Mark.

[Charlotte]

crying!!!!!! realy good but i dont know.. its what happend to my brother sooo..

[Mr.Writer]

Ohh, I'm very sorry Charlotte

[Charlotte]

:) its all goods

[B]

Oh intense
i hope it gets better

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)

[Jessica Lima]

So many people go through this... Many will be able to relate. Thanks for Sharing.

[Mr.Writer]

No problem

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!!

[Surya]

That hurts Shaan...and it explained a lot in a lively manner..I liked it..:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)