Fate (Poem)

fate

I imagine you and I;

Walking on the sea shore

Taking a selfie when sunset comes 

Holding hands when it gets dark

Eating spicy street food

Posting weird pics of each other

I imagine our problems;

Talking to our parents

Arguing with them to get married

Doing court marriage 

Getting thrown out of the house 

Our parents considering us dead 

I imagine our children;

Always jumping around the house

Throwing tantrums when they get upset

Meeting their friends grandparents

Asking for their grandparents

Getting thrown out of that house when asked

Reviews

[Raj Sahu]

You wrote this work beautifully. I like the way you expressed the whole story from marriage to children and all. I enjoyed the work. Well done. 😊

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Raj! :)

[Stacy Purvis]

Lol...getting thrown outta everywhere.
This is an enjoyable read. It really is. It makes me think about being young and reckless.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Anastasia! :D

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Sad, very well-written poem about parental rejection affecting generations. "Our parents considering us dead" and children "asking for their grandparents" who are absent from their lives..Excellent work!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much! :)

[Bear]

Nice Soliloquy. what I like best about them is you can express emotions and ideas in your own personality. Smooth talkers and hesitant thinkers could have the same idea but express it so differently that there are no similarities between the two. Some creative writing classes use this, it is a trick to learn how each student thinks, sneaky isn't it. Well done I like it Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Bear!!! :)

[heartspeaks]

ouch...quite tragic i tell you...😂 but sweet too... i wish the parents would have accepted them but then , you wouldn't got a chance to write a poetry ...lol. jokes apart...sometimes it made me sad but then its very sweet... Vivid imagination...keep writing

[Mr.Writer]

Thank yo

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Heart!

[Hope]

Well.... what you wrote really happens.
You have conveyed it really well.
Keep it up!

[Mr.Writer]

Lol thank you Naat!

[Hope]

My pleasure...

[Wajiha Nayeem]

hahah...a pretty cute poem this is...

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Wajiha! Really appreciated :)

[Surya]

Haha, a life, you shown it...it's veautiful..I liked it...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Surya!

[Farhan Shaikh]

I like first paragraph and the scenario as well they way you created it..It's just awesome

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Farhan! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

It's like you have created a scenario of life in few words. I really enjoyed reading this.

[Mr.Writer]

Really appreciated Najam :)