The drowning sun

I'm lost in the beauty 

of the drowning sun

my eyes, steady to the horizon

watching the sun cast it's golden rays

upon the clouds

as it leaves its bleeding marks in the sky

and begins to descend 

into the ocean

the colors changing fast

as the drowning sun

soon disappears

its warmth fading

leaving a cold feeling

within me

Reviews

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

Such elegant emotion. A feeling of calm and yet a little sad. Nice poem. It really is a swell poem. Maybe i should start getting into doing some poetry. Stuff like this might do me some good. Letting out what it is that i feel deep inside. It'd be a rather good read. Wouldn't you think? Keep up the good poetry. there might be something deeper coming from you yet. Wouldn't you figure? It's always good to read a nice made poem. Always uplifting. Never a drag. Poems like these... i'd read anytime.

[Mr.Writer]

Poetry indeed lets us pour out what we're feeling inside of us, maybe like something really deep as you said!
I'm really glad that you might start doing poetry! :) Thank you so much Joanna!

[Priyanshi]

The drowning sun...how beautiful is that scene and you described it very well.
wonderful poem.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Priyanshi! :)

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure.

[Hope]

The way you described is great.
Slow yet steady rhythm really worked.
Loved this poem!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Neetha! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. No words to tell how perfectly the beauty of sunset is captured. This is flawless...

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Najam! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

It was really a pleasure reading this one. ☺

[Mr.Writer]

I'm rlly glad you enjoyed! :)

[Joanna Matilda Barlow]

And when i say anytime... I mean... Anytime.

[Surya]

It's too nice...you painted a pure emotion here...I liked it...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Surya!! :)

[Inda]

This is nice, has a calming tone and is shock full of emotions as well. Good job!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Inda, it's really appreciated! :)

[mae23]

I loved picturing this in my head. The way you set up and used imagery in this poem was beautiful. Lovely read.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Mae! :)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

i could really imagine this...so wonderful and beautifully penned.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Wajiha!! :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

You created a beautiful scene with your words..i liked the poem

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Farhan! :)