But when?

But when...?

I need a hope

a reason

to live in this world

I need someone

to hold my hand and tell me

it's going to alright

Someone who could love me;

all life and never

leave me alone

Celebrate every moment

of happiness we get

and cherish it to our fullest

Twirling me around 

on the dance floor

and picking me up when I fall

Doing the simplest things with me

like talking walks around the park

or going shopping with me

Having beautiful children

and deciding on names

for them , together

And at the end of the day

being with me again as we say

how much we appreciate each other

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my friend. We need reason and purpose to be alive. I enjoyed your words and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Gwenn the little girl]

Your poem is both heart-warming and heart-wrenching simultaneously! You speak of your wistful dreams with longing and your piece speaks of the things that you do not have, and thus it is why you dream. Your poem speaks that what you need has yet to be filled, and add that to your title "But when?", the result is a beautiful piece filled with the combination of longing and dreaming. It was pretty clever of you to add that title, it completely changes the meaning of the story and the emotions that come with it.

Your passion in your poems are something to commend about! :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much for the Gwenn for the review and amazing comments!! :)
I rlly appreciate it :)

[Firemay]

This is simply beautiful!

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Firemay! :))

[Sofia]

It's lovely and beautiful...liked it..
Well penned! :)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Sofia! :)

[Davidgeo]

Anyone who joins Silente and his little SJW bully clan will get the same treatment. You will get the same treatment.

[Priyanshi]

That's what everybody wishes to have in their life...Very simple and beautiful write.
I loved it.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Priyanshi!! :)

[mae23]

This is very beautiful and the sentiment is wonderful.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Mae! :)

[HeyJadeXO]

The companionship feel is deep and well written.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you! :)

[Surya]

In need of energy...almost everyone at some point in lives need it...It was honest Shaan and I enjoyed it...:)

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Surya! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I thought you're quite young to really think on these lines, Shaan :P lol ;P

Nice read. I agree with Carol, it does read like a prayer...

Btw, it should be 'it's going to be alright' in the 2nd stanza last line...

Well penned.

[Mr.Writer]

Haha I am pretty young to think about it indeed, but it's alright :D
Thank you Yumna!! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

yeah that's what I think ;p
you're welcome :))