The Battle Within

 

 

 

I sit alone

in this graveyard of my life.

Searching for answers to questions

I’ve yet to learn.

Discovering nothing.

Opening my eyes,

only to realize that they are

glued shut.

So I turn them into my head

to watch the way my brain works;

Maybe I will gain some understanding of myself

through this.

I realize there is a membrane

posing as a barrier to this task.

I feel around me.

The floor is cold, wet,

my fingers stick to it.

I pry them away

and move my hands up my body.

I cannot find myself.

I feel my heart drop out

into my hands;

Barely beating.

I attempt compressions.

Trying to save my own life.

Panic fills my mind.

My thoughts remain.

I feel nothing.

My heart drops to the ground,

shattering like a delicate piece of glass.

The sound pierces my ears,

straight through to my brain...

 

And I am lost.

Reviews

[Wildecat]

This sounds like a nightmare to me. Lots of emotion. I commend you on turning your life around. I have been there and done that. It takes a lot of guts and Intessinal fortitude. Well done.

[Michael]

IT reads like the telling of a nightmare. You do an excellent job with "just enough" detail to allow the reader's mind to take over and run away with things. I like the surreal way you have left things.


Well done!

[Jasper]

For me, this has a real personal apocolyptic feel about it. There are some real strong images here that I found complelling and almost disturbing in their intensity...I could see your heart shatter on the floor. The images will stay with me for quite a while. Thanks for sharing.

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

Wow..

This is quite an interesting piece.

I especially liked the way you ended it. It had such a ring to it, such finality..

The pacing worked wonderfully for this piece, too.

Nice write!