The Submission

Submission. That's what he would remember that day for. Submission to one's fate. The inescapable fate of being forever invisible to the only man he wished to be noticed by.

 He remembered the power cut, right after the funeral. His father sitting alone in that dark room, a single candle casting shadows  to his features, distorted to inhuman proportions. The notes of Mozart, elevating the silence to an almost mystifying experience.

 He remembered himself, a young boy, standing outside that door, making a promise to himself. He was going to become the son his father wanted him to be. This was his chance. He  was going to be the Son. The Only Son. His father had no choice but to finally "see" him.

 Inside the dark room, his father let out  his final breath along with Mozart's final  notes, his heart too weak  to handle the pain  of the untimely loss.

He remembered every detail of that day. It was the day his brother had beaten him again. Even from the grave.

Reviews

[Abraham Kureshi]

Fantastic write, truly refreshing!

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Akankshya Mishra]

Brilliant and captivating! That was a perfect little short story

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!I'm glad you liked it!

[Nathan Spark]

You wrench our hearts when you bring us into the house of this common family feeling experience. Brilliant.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for taking the time to read and the kind review!I appreciate it!

[wordman]

sad write,this is the worst of times

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for reading!

[wordman]

my pleasure

[Gee]

Loved the twist at the end.
The mistress of the mini story, that is you Ms P.
Hope all is well in sunny Greece.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for reading!I'm glad you enjoyed it!Greetings from -not so sunny lately- Greece!

[Gee]

Welcome to my world !!!
You're most welcome

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Wow so thought provoking
Sad passionate and clever
Great read thanks

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for your kind words.I appreciate it!

[Mrudula Rani]

when he finally thought he could stand on his own out of the shadows of his brother to impress his father, the earth opened and swallowed the opportunity! You described the moment in a breathtakingly beautiful precision .

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for taking the time to read and the encouraging review!

[Mrudula Rani]

You are welcome.

[Neville]

Flippin heck... you just sent one almighty shiver down my spine and back again... a magnificently tragic little write..................Neville

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for reading and the comment!

[Neville]

no worries, no problem, my pleasure.... N