At Sea

About the time I showed up unprepared for an examination...

I was lost
I was cold
And at what cost?
I wasn’t told

I thought I was ready
I thought I was safe
They told me to be weary
But I couldn’t escape

Unprepared and unfinished,
I felt the need to be punished
But when my fears overcame,
I realized this wasn’t a game

I did my best,
With what I was blessed;
I used my mind
But the answers were hard to find

I tried and persevered;
Until the end neared
I thought I did well,
To go through that hell

The result did come,
Though not good for some
The turn was mine
And I got seventy-nine!

I felt satisfied and relieved
At something I never believed
To come true for me
This must have been my destiny.

But I couldn’t forget that day
On which the price I’ve yet to pay
It haunts me even now
Though I don’t know how

I was longing to be free

The day I found myself

At sea.

Author's Note

The first poem I ever wrote. Amateur is all it is. But its a start!

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

i quite like this, it makes me laugh; though i'm not sure rhyme is the best way to portray this. if you're frantic who wants gentle, lulling waves, you know? you close your poetry well, though. despite my own person preferences, i'll take this at face value; and see that this is quite wonderful. nice work.

[Helen Crutchett]

No its not amateurish at all. I enjoyed this a lot and it took my mind back to the dreaded school examinations lol. Well done!

[Searching 4 Serenity]

I myself laughed reading this. You expressed your feelings well about the examination.

My rating for this...
A+

[A.E. Surdam]

I just so adore this. It was very interesting and had me shivering as I read. The sea can be so wonderful, angry and then calm. You never know what it might be only until you see. "It haunts me even now though I don't know how I was longing to be free" is a favorite sentence of mine. Well down. You should be proud and ecstatic!

[poetic soul]

and it surely is a good start! nice write... yo thots are good, and that wat matters..u sure have a beginner's luck, mate!

[Dai Edenburough]

Well done! I wouldn't call it amateur at all! The one line that confused me was how you got 79? What's the meaning behind that? I love that last stanza, I can relate very much to it, grand job, keep it up! XD

[FJ Davis]

Amusing account; interesting parallel. Especially appreciate the last two lines.
Impressive first effort, Murtuza.

[Kelly M.]

I like it. It's simple and true. You express your feelings here nicely. Nice job!