Dear Bella...

A Confession

On that cracked old bench
we sat down our thoughts.
My ears to your voice,
my eyes on you locked.

 

Oh dear Bella,
my senses you've filled;
your memory leaks out,
on my heart is spilled.

 

To know it had been
on you all this time,
this secret I'll keep
with my lovesick mind.

 

I know I'm too late.
Another has won
this race I've so lost.
I've been well outdone.

This face, all ragged
and pimple-stricken;
undeserving of
such fine a woman.

So fret not dear Bella,
for my heart will survive.
However small,
its pieces I will find.

 

And mend it back
to what it was before;
to before I fell victim,
to your magical lure.

 

Goodbye dear Bella,
I'll leave you this letter
to where it began
where no more it matters.

 

A weight was hanged upon my heart;
pushing, forcing down its thrust
waiting to snap, to break it apart

 

I guess that's why it's called a crush.

Author's Note

So this is my first real 'Love' poem. Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[Dahlia Phoenix]

This was really sweet. Having a crush on someone sometimes can be painful because if you never act upon instinct you will never achieve to get their attention or love.

"And I know too well
to indulge my imagination;
for this silly, little feeling
is just mere infatuation."

Nice touch. This might be your first love poem but you nailed it! :)

[Bridgette's Ink]

Really loved this. Very heartfelt. And thank you for the review.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Love, sweetness and broken promise to divulge the meaning of sourced pleasure,w ell done, good read.

[Samuel Dickens]

I think you're right--a "crush" often does result in something more akin to the word's literal translation. No other subject drives the artist to create more than love. Judging by these words, I'd say you've experienced the bitter pain of romance lost.

[M.Babu]

Haha my friend you nailed it :D

There was alot to be admired from this piece:
"So fret not dear Bella,
for my heart will survive
However small,
it's pieces I will find."

"So goodbye dear Bella,
I'll leave you this letter
to the place where it began
where no more it does matter."

The persona seems strong and i think he'll survive the heartbreak. He seems like the type of guy who rarely wants to open himself up to the idea of "love" but he came head to head with it on his path. His crush on Bella seems genuine and his hurt, though adequately hidden is still visible in cracks of his armor...

You've weaved us a delightful piece of story poetry my friend :D

~M.Babu~

[Light and ashes]

I think thats why its called a crush too. This is a great poem filled with your shattering heart.

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Murtuza,

Very nice, in fact. Your matter-of-fact analysis of the situation and you opening dealing with it is refreshing. I really liked that about the poem.

Greatly enjoyed.

Very best regards,

Rick

Stunning work, and lovely almost musical cadence. You feel the love in this piece.

[Kelly M.]

Aw, I loved it. :) Beautiful imagery, and the words had this captivating touch-- like a magic spell upon you. ;) Very heartfelt and sweet.

This one is definitely added to my favorites. ;)

[Nishant Gupta]

nice one, read mine too " QUEST OF LIFE".