Spirtual Breakage

broken soul you can write about anything that has broken your soul or someone else's.

Pain has broken me on many levels
There are times when I am physically broken
Then there are times when I am mentally broken
Yet the pain of having a broken soul is indescribable
As time marches forward
I had feared my soul will break

I try to super glue the cracks with blissful ignorance
It only holds for awhile
Before I know it
My soul breaks violently
The pieces of my soul are ripping me internally

I fall to my knees wishing for it to stop
I succumb to tears
I cried for a good while
Then I collapsed flatly on the ground
I learned how powerful a soul can be

Author's Note

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Reviews

[DannyLynne Riley]

I love the line "I try to superglue the cracks with blissful ignorance...it only holds for awhile" U have a gift for expresion with insight

[JENY]

Wow….wow wow..
Mustafaaaa..
Fantastic…..
I love your poetic soul so much…
It will never break….

[Chirinos20]

It is a excellent poem. The soul is one of the things that keep us together. It is a struggle to keep it whole day by day. It must break at some point or another. In those times is when we are more weak and hopeless. There is always something that pulls that back together and so we can go back into the struggle day by day. Thanks for sharing!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Spirtual breakage. I have search the world to find the perfect people and religion. I believe each of us need more or less. I dislike when people blame God for the world problems. God is far away. We made this world a good or terrible place. I like this poem. We will break often in a life. The heart and mind will be tested till we know what we want. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Joshua Donahue]

a really nice piece. i dont think any changes should be made to it. i feel like you convey the message beautifully and the emotions are well-told.

[Bette]

"I try to super glue the cracks with blissful ignorance" i really like this well done

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a powerful poem that talks about the deepest form of hurt and despair. When your soul is tired and weak no longer wanting to fight. I like this poem and you did a wonderful job using the challenge this week.

[deeps]

I try to super glue the cracks with blissful ignorance
It only holds for awhile
Before I know it
My soul breaks violently

I love this part. I Like it the way it is.
Very well written and expressed.

[The Analog Kid]

Ok, honestly, I would take out the last line, because the second to last line punctuates nicely. Also, social pressure seems seems clumsy in the first stanza. Otherwise, a nice short, yet powerful, short write:)