Betrayal.

Because at times, the people you can take down a bullet for, are the ones behind the trigger.

And all of a sudden,

nothing held its meaning,

She knew it was useless, by now,

as she cried kneeling.

Oh, the scars were deep,

deeper..

A shiver ran down her spine,

and her body surrendered.

Her head spun,

her blurry vision began to darken.

Was that it? Was it all over already?

All she could think about was the first day they met..

Reviews

[SuspectGray]

Perhaps your best line was the title description "the people you can take down a bullet for, are the ones behind the trigger". In addition to the pain I think you did a great job of capturing just how quickly a betrayal shatters your world

[Destiny Dreamer]

WOW very intense piece. I love the way U express your feelings. And I'm speechless, I really felt this one very DEEP!

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thank you so much :')

[Pratik Mishra]

This poem is completely awesome!
Your goal was to convey betrayal in your poem, and you did it perfectly. :)
Great work

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much, pratik. :) I'm glad you liked it.

[Pratik Mishra]

thnx. Would you like to be my friend? I have sent u a request.

[Pratik Mishra]

oh, you have already accepted the request. Thanks! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

When our world falls apart. Hard to see the light. A emotional ride in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much, Coyote ^.^ it's an honour to see you enjoyed it!

[Coyote Poetry]

It was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[prajakta]

beautiful:-)i could feel an intense pain.many can relate.loved it:-)

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

I'm glad you enjoyed it. :') Thankyou!

[AaronFreitas]

Beautiful write my friend. Good work!

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much ^.^ I'm glad you liked it.

[Brian]

Whoa. Intense. Beautiful. Tragic.

Just freaking gut-wrenching. I mean, betrayal is a wicked thing. So vile and unyielding in its grip, and to think of it seated next to a bullet, as suggested, well.. there is no greater loss is there?

No greater sacrifice and sadness to be had?

I cannot fathom this. And yet I have through your words.

It was brilliant, and brutal in its beauty.

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou Brian :') This was encouraging. And, the worst thing about betrayal is it never comes from the unknown. That is what makes it wicked.

[Brian]

You know, you're absolutely right. It doesn't come from the stranger, but rather the fellow close --and sometimes the one closest -- to us. Wicked is a beautiful description of it.

[Ashwin Thakur]

This is one of the best poems i have read
I am from india and many people from here should read this poem
Short poem for me and i am surely hungry for more
:):)

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much, Ashwin :') I'm glad you liked it ^ And I'll surely publish such stuff if you enjoy it.

[Ashwin Thakur]

U can read my poems too if u want as a wonderful niegh bour

[Isabel25]

When something like this happens memories are what is going to hurt the most. They tend to tear you apart from within and we will always wonder why we never saw it coming. Guilt is also another factor that would rule in such cases; guilt about the fact that we let ourselves to be taken for granted and fooled and used.
This is an excellent poem. Short but sharp. Simple but strong. Good one Nabeeha :) And i like the head-note very much!

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much :') Glad you liked it.

[wordman]

sad,heartfelt and I hope not true.but dodging bullets is a way of life for many
you did a great job

[Nabeeha Mustafa]

Thankyou so much :')