Repeat it.

Something something cain killed abel because being compared to your brother sucks.

You’re not special.

You dont know anything new about me.

You don't get to tell me what to do,

You’re not special.

You weren’t handpicked out of the bunch of people around.

No, you aren't special.

You're not new.

I’ve heard that stupid f*****g phrase all night, 

You don’t know anything about me.

Yet you have the nerve to repeat it.

Repeat it.

I’ve heard one phrase all night,

Come on, repeat it for me.

Repeat it.

“You’re special”, repeat it.

You’re not special.

You don’t know anything new about me.

You don’t know my middle name.

You barely repeat my name without the shadow of what I’m not.

Come on, surely you’re special, right?

for knowing 

the baggage that's written in bold letters on my forehead.

Come on, do something.

Repeat it.

“Come on, repeat it”.

Repeat the steps that were taken before you, 

“I’m special, I get to tell you what you are meant to do”.

Repeat it.

“It’s not me”, she’s just repeating

what she thinks to be true.

Come on, my turn,

repeat it.

Reviews

[JayG]

• "You’re not special."

Yes I am. Especially yo me.

• "You dont know anything new about me."

Yes I do: You just insulted people you don’t know.

• "You don't get to tell me what to do,"

That’s pretty bossy for someone who knows nothing about the one they're talking AT.

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My point? It’s meaningful to you, as you read. But what’s in it for a reader? You, someone unknown, are complaining to someone not introduced about unspecified events. Why would readers want to know how you feel today, unless you make the situation meaningful to THEM, as-they-read?

In pretty much everything you’ve posted, that’s the situation, because you’ve forgotten that the reader comes to you to-be-entertained, not informed. And what’s entertaining about overhearing a stranger grumping about someone not treating them as they want to be treated? For all the reader knows, it's your fault.

In short: you need to invite the reader to participate. Instead of telling them how you feel, make THEM feel it. Give THEM reason to care.

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