Cold Ocean

the ocean is alive

the water's cold

i run into the waves

it's winter

but there is no season cold enough

body's numb

i don't get how this is uncomfortable

i lay on my back

i float on the surface easily

i stare at the sky

white clouds move quickly

i sink on purpose

so the waves run over me

i hear the crash

i see the foam through dark green water

i see the sun making strange reflections

i act like im dead

i'm tossed around in coldness while i hold my breath

with a black eye, i hop over small waves

with open cuts, i dive under large waves

i know the ocean

im careful enough

so im perfectly fine

it's just 

great

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

with open cuts, i dive under large waves

i know the ocean

im careful enough

so im perfectly fine




it's just




great

[Horizons]

Lol... great description here, i'd love to say that you've a great talent of writing with "Suspense", you made this poem with damn much suspense, when i was reading this piece, i was lost into the world of movies i think, i made some views in my mind and it was looking like am watching a thrilling and a suspense movie.. it was looking so cool from starting , i was enjoying and reading in a hope what happens next..what happens next..let's read and read... would the guy die or not? what'd happen if the cold waves take the guy away? and so on then suddenly you turned into a great writing with the great ending where you've mentioned "the guy's perfectly nice and enjoying the ocean.. " ..lol it made me thrilled really. If i'd a suggestion to give ya then i'd say, just write one story on it.. a great suspense story.. it's gonna be thrilled too... i enjoyed this write ..am gonna fav. it and gonna keep it in my library right now. Thanks for writing such a nice, suspense piece and sharing here with all of us. Well done, awesome imaginary .. brilliant job!

[Sami Khalil]

"i act like im dead

i'm tossed around in coldness while i hold my breath

with a black eye, i hop over small waves

with open cuts, i dive under large waves

i know the ocean"

A splendid read and write...Thank you for penning...:)

[Laminators Dubai]

i really get the first mean but there is something that only the writer knows...
and its a straight and sure its thoughtful...
thanks for sharing the ocean of cold thoughts...

[N.A.]

Oh my your comment sounds like a poem. "Ocean of cold thoughts." That sounds like poetry...

[Laminators Dubai]

after all we are writers...
right...
have fun...