utopia.

It must be wondrous,

to live inside your world,

which is nothing but a fantasy.

 

It must be beautiful,

to think you have it all,

and that you will never fall.

 

It must be exquisite,

to be so bewitched,

because oblivion is utopia.

Reviews

[ANTO]

This is right up my street Natalie. I often have mused if it is better to be oblivious to the world around us or to be sensitive as the writer is - is having awareness to the pain worth being able to write about it where the 'oblivious' don't experience the writers lot but they can't write about it - but then again would they miss writing about it then at all?
Your poem is thought-prodding and the artisans conundrum.
Well written - thanks for sharing

[Natalie]

Thank you! :) that was the message I tried to portray, and I'm glad you could pick up on it! Thanks again for stopping by!

[Sanjh]

Short and beautiful. The choice of words is perfect.
Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed it...:)

[Natalie]

Thank you Sanjh :)

[Sanjh]

You are welcome...:)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Short n Precisely captured thoughts. Liked that u could do it n such lil words.

[Natalie]

Thank you! :) your review is very much appreciated!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like how you use the words. Twisting them to create the very good ending. Utopia is touched by the few and wished for by the many. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Natalie]

Thank you for taking time out to read my poem! :) I looked at some of your work and I thought they were quite beautiful as well.

[Coyote Poetry]

Thank you Natalie. I hope to read more of your work.

[MBUYISA]

good read
i like the first stanza and needless to say the rhyme in the second stanza is a bomb...lol
many thanks for sharing

[Natalie]

Thank you! I really appreciated your comment :)

[MBUYISA]

you are welcome