From Eden

A troubled past that caused me some sadness. I wanted to share, so I hope this doesn't bother you. I hope you enjoy.

I am from Eden and

The innocence I held close,

It was not lost, 

But it was stolen.

A lit candle and  

The only light in the dark. 

It sparked a memory when 

I was younger than noon. 

An abandoned house and 

The broken windows called. 

A sweet serenity that 

Was utterly distorted. 

I followed him and 

The flashing eruption of the sirens 

Grabbed my attention.

It screamed a fair warning. 

The glass gave me cuts and

He gave me a scar. 

While I watched the flickering red lights 

I cried in silence. 

I am from Eden and 

The innocence I held close, 

It was not lost, 

But it was stolen.

Author's Note

Ignore any mistakes please 😖 Share your thoughts!

Reviews

[mercy party]

it sunk in for sure. This is only an interpretation, when we are young we remember Eden how we want to remember it. the idea of being stolen from Eden represents some accountability issues (again just my take). The Poem either way stirs up great thought and thick emotion. good.

[Natehy]

Thanks a lot ! You were quite accurate. I really wanted to use the garden of Eden as reference, I hope it turned out well.

[mercy party]

it did turn out well. The cool thing you accomplish when using a reference like that, is any reader can make it their own. That to me is huge for effective and quality writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad journey in your words dear Natehy. You made the reader feel the lost and the sadness. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Tony Jordan]

Yes
Stop being fake
Great message!!!!!!!!!!

[mournful bear]

WOW! very touching. we all try to hold on to our Eden some are stolen others go dormant, some are still around, rarity. great penning!!!!!!

[Natehy]

Yes! I really do agree. I hope my message got across and I hoped my imagery was sought out! Thank you so much for the compliment. It was a goal for the audience to feel the language of my inner emotions. I hope it got across.

[Aishwarya Prem]

Pure emotions !!! I liked this one..especially all the last lines of each stanza..good work Natehy

[Natehy]

Thank you so much !

[Harley Quinn]

Wow! This blew me away. This is an amazing poem.

[Natehy]

Thank you for the compliment (:

[Harley Quinn]

It was a pleasure reading it. :)

[J.A. Blackwell]

Wow, that's deep and well said. Fantastic job

[Natehy]

I'm glad you liked it!

[wordman]

when innocence is stolen it leaves a permanent scar
but you have to rise above it or it will dictate your life,it is him that should carry the scar

[Natehy]

Yeah, I most definitely agree with you. Success with hardships or failure with hardships, that's kind of how I see. Thank you so much for this comment.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Everyone is born innocent but not everyone dies as one.
This poem sure reflects that fact although I sense regrets here. It is very well-written.

"A lit candle and
The only light in the dark.
It sparked a memory when
I was younger than noon."

I especially liked this stanza! Good work☺👍

[Natehy]

Thank you so much ! I was trying to use as much imagery as I can throughout this poem.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Imagery is the key :)
You're welcome :)