Red Rainbow Halos

Impressions from a lovely night sky. Amazing.

 I watched a moon show last night,
Somehow

it made everything

al'right,

The sky was

emptying down universe in

its amazing way,
An expanding concave surface

breaching billions of galaxies

far away,

The wispy clouds

sketched out vast dimensions

to me,
The wind blew them past

sieving moonlight in

color tinged degree,

Red rainbow halos

appeared in the cottony white islands

gliding,
Across the brilliant half-face

of an orb so familiar

it was surprising!

The stars were mini-moons;

the moon was

that white,
The sky was endless beyond them;

the stars were

that bright,

The air was clear and

seemed fashioned for the sole purpose of

holding the figments above it,
So I breathed it in deeply

stood in one spot looking upwards

and took in every bit. 

 

Reviews

[Fantasyfairy]

A nice piece, but a little choppy and it doesn't run as smoothly as it could. Shorten the lines a little, or make one line into two and you have the makings of a masterpiece here. A beautiful, vivid poem that makes me wish I were there to see the beautiful sight you saw. XX

[Midnight Shadow]

The imagery here is vibrant and deeply effective! It paints beautiful pictures in my mind as I read each line. Brilliant job!

[Brenda Sue]

Wow what imagery! Beautifully penned. Great job.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Very deep and beautiful piece. I'm splendid by the colors of the entire piece.
A very great and vivid imagination. Overall, its an awesome read.
Thanks for posting it here :)

~!~ Keep writing ~!~

[sunlight]

This was simply awesome.I enjoyed immensely.Thanks for reading my latest poem

[E. M. Murren]

What a beautiful poem. I do love an eclipse. You have described it so lovingly. Your pen is graceful. Thank you for sharing this.

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Very beautiful...very visual. Thank you for sharing this with the rest of the world...

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

This is a softly colourful piece that has sent a breeze through my grey work-laden morning. You have drawn all the elements together into a tapestry of nature. I liked your imagery too, especially: 'The wind blew them past sieving moonlight in'. Most satisfying!

[JP thinks the WC is apt..]

This is a softly colourful piece that has sent a breeze through my grey work-laden morning. You have drawn all the elements together into a tapestry of nature. I liked your imagery too, especially: 'The wind blew them past sieving moonlight in'. Most satisfying!

[Robert Wilson]

Beautiful. Aside for the aforementioned long lines, it's absolutely amazing

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I really liked this piece. It reminds me of the old saying, "The best things in life are free." The federal government hasn't started taxing us for looking at the night sky to pay for more wars, have they? :)

It is amazing what kind of entertainment can still be had for free. Good write!

-Gabe