Missing You So Much

As I lay here on my bed listening to everybody talking
my head is spinning with thoughts of you. 
I hear your voice throughout the day 
telling me you love me and that I'm the one for you.

Over and over again I hear your voice 
and feel your arms wrapped around me 
but when I look around you’re not here. 
I'm wishing you will realize soon that I do care.
Wishing and hoping that someday soon we will be together again.

I love you so much 
and I miss seeing you everyday 
and being next to you at night. 
You never come to see me anymore 
so I lay here in my bed crying 
because I miss you so much and I love you to.


I miss hearing you say that you love me.
I miss spending time with you everyday.
I can't seem to get you out of my head.
I love you baby and I miss you too.    

     

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Reviews

[InterijentoWrites]

As I lay here on my bed listening to everybody talking-- Should be talk, rather than talking.

my head is spinning with thoughts of you.-- If Im not mistaken, I believe the first letter of each line should be capitalized in poems. But I may be wrong. You have a couple of instances of this if you decide to change it.

because I miss you so much and I love you to.-- Should be too, not to.

Your stanzas are a bit repetitive. The lines that stuck out most in my head are I miss you and I love you. And while that is the point of your story, it didnt quite move me to feel that way. Your last two stanzas are not as powerful as your first two. I quite enjoyed the first two. The last two need more power in the words. But it is a great start.

[PokemonFan#1]

A sad love story of the writer and the lover missing each other.

It was a beautiful piece.

KEEP IT UP!

[Sarah]

lovely the last part was the best

[Mohamed Hani]

wonderful one. amazing is all i can say

[Missin*Dakota*Carrico]

This was a very moving poem, and I loved it. It seems like I know what you were thinking and feeling when you wrote it because this is very similar to the poetry I write. Very deep sadness, but showing a strong love for someone. I really enjoyed reading this. And I think your grammar could use a little work, but other than that, it was perfect.

[Kim's Poems]

WOW loved the last stanza alot,
This is a deep, powerful write,
So emotional, nicely written and expressed!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice poem of love. Words are what we need to hear. Action of love are important also. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[RavenRoo]

This pretty much sums up my life right about now. I love it! Great job! :)

[werejustcountrygirls]

Okay, so the first time I sent my review it said error so im sorry if this shows up twice or seems rushed, its just that Im retyping it. BUT, I said that i can definetly.relate to this and without giving you my whole boring lifestory i can say that this is recurring over and over again for me. Anyways, i love how you managed to capture such feeling in this one poem.

[werejustcountrygirls]

I can relate to this so much, and without giving you my entire boring backstory I can say that not only has this happened once, it reoccures over and over again. Now, as a matter of fact. I love how you captured the feeling in this poem.