Dark, Desolate Home

I want to go home. I don't care how terrible it is. I simply want home.

I'm hanging on a hill,

a lush green hill,

a crumbling green hill,

my shadow's dream.

 

I'm dreaming of a dream,

a dream within my dream,

my dream's dream,

my home of dreams.

 

I'm searching for a place,

one where butterflies scream,

where the flowers bleed,

and the ravens sing.

 

I'm looking for my home,

my dark, desolate home,

the only place I've known,

the only place I'll know.

 

I'm falling 'cause of you,

because you won't take me home,

because you say there's too much risk,

you say there's too much fear.

 

I'm aware of the beasts,

of the monsters I've made,

they won't hurt a fly,

they barely touch the sky.

 

I'm going to escape to the trees,

to look at my home,

to its long lost loan,

to that which once shone.

 

I'm seeing what you say,

but I won't listen because it's

why I sadden, it's where I

slept, it's where I bloomed.

 

I'm not asking for anything

but to see the manor where I grew up,

where I grew old,

where I was sold.

 

I'm crying for you to take me to my

mother, to take me to my

father, to where they had risen,

to where they had died.

 

I'm asking once more,

for you to come and

take me home, my home,

my dark, desolate home.

Author's Note

Wrote this in math...intriguing, no?

Reviews

[deadlife]

Very good. Nice flow, sometimes a bit out of the line..but as long as it's coming out of the heart..it's always the right one! :)
and yeah.. I also welcome you home.. All's waiting..Paow Bhaji, shahi paneer, dal makhni, paneer tikka, dum aalu, dahi chawal, aalu ke parathey, and now a days Gajar ka halwa also ;P
you're most welcom anytime dear.

[Clockwork]

Did I catch a few Poe references here? I really liked the repetition here. You also used your rhyme well in this piece. This write has a natural rhythm to it, and in some ways it fells as if it is a mantra. Well done.

[Jeff Miller]

very intriguing

[CircusNerd]

ohhh carr russel is clearly the most inspirational teacher ever considering the epitomes of our writing careers are birthed there :) but you of course are the much better writer between us, and i love the flow of this :) yea, i'll take you home and we can eat pav bhaji, parathas, and paneer :)P

[odhiambo]

yes.very loaded with feelings.