Bleed

Brilliance ingested through your holy heart 

Through your eyes of wonder

Bleeding the mist I inhale through my flowering nostrils

I smell

Intertwining your hairs breath as I pray

All one in time and space encapsulating my essence in the palm of your inviting hand

Reviews

[Barbara Borel]

I love this. Romantic. Using the senses. Very lovely

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!! :)

[Valentine]

I see this as a Christian praying, and believing he is placing not only his hand but his all into the Masters hand. Valentine

[Neal S]

Thank you for the review. :) I like you're interpretation.

[Alex Doerner]

I really like this. It really puts feelings that are hard to describe into words.

[Neal S]

Thank you Alex.

[Papaya]

This makes me think of forfeiting innocence and purity for some reason. Like a virgin offering her gift or a heart newly penetrated.

[Neal S]

Interesting take on this. Glad it made you think and thanks for the review :)

[aLittlePain]

This is the jam, it's an intoxicating love...when they fill your cup to over flowing. Sweet. R xo

[Neal S]

Thank Ray. Always a pleasure when you stop by!

[Lorry]

Beautifully penned Neal. This suggests to me captivation, pure and simple. When we are all consumed by one person or thought that our focus narrows and imagination is compelled to think only of them. If only it were that easy to focus our attention like that all the time, we would probably be far more advanced than we are. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.

[Neal S]

Lovely review Nemo. Thank you so much.

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST IMPRESSIONS

There was a sensuality with the depiction of love that I was mesmerized by.

CONTENT AND FORMAT

The speaker has devoted themselves to a love interest. I sensed that this was the beginning; a lustful reaction. Blood often symbolizes life and passion. This was portrayed in the "bleeding the mist." The narrator was bewitched by her "brilliance" or intelligence. Subjectively, the he or she was not attracted initially by physical beauty. Instead, they have been captivated by the other person's mind.

CLOSING THOUGHTS

Overall, I adored the sensual undertones; it was subtle and romantic. Thank you for sharing!

sincerely,
ria

[Neal S]

Thank you for your thoughts ria.

[Vria P Crow]

Welcome. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and amazing use of words and thoughts. You create place, thoughts and visions with the good description. A perfect ending to the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Neal.