The Path

Even if you embrace me until it's suffocating
We will never become one.
In a place deeper than gentleness
Touching each other is merely pain.
Please bind the two of us.
We will dream no more,
Joining hands in uncertainty
Walking towards
The cruel dawn.

True words are surely
Somewhere in the true world,
Lurking
In our wordless night.
Surely even now
 
Meeting each other in order to know loneliness,
We won't know until we exchange a kiss.
Even so, I am trembling with the joy
Of having met you.
Please support my heart.
We will dream no more,
We can't run to a warm place.
We will surely overcome
The cruel dawn.
The abandoned quietness
Will surely find
The true words
In order to lovingly hurt each other.
Someday surely
 
Even if you embrace me until it's suffocating
We will never become one.
O cold starts before dawn,
Please light
The path that's just for us.

Reviews

[~M&A~]

Sad, Sad. But a good nice flow. and yes, it makes me wonder, is the O supposed to be there? If it is or not, it doesn't matter, it doesn't ruin the poem at all ^^ I like it though

[Marlena]

Very beautiful c: My only little tick with this piece is that third to last line, the beginning of it, "O cold starts", I think it's a typo, and if it isn't I don't think you should start that line that way, the "O" stems the flow, and I think it should be fixed/changed, but it's up to you. ^_^