Be Naked

This is a short one, but it's one none the less. Hoping to get the rest of the stuff I've been working on out soon. Enjoy Inspired by Baudelaire's poem, Be Drunk. Also worth a read

You

will never know the freedom

of unadulterated openness

until you've been

naked.

The shackles of restriction

the hiddeness of cover

all a proclamation

of opinionated slavery.

So leave behind

all that is not

of your own accord.

Let be what may be

and control only

that which requires control.

The wind will thank you

and you will rejoice

with the wind.

So be naked

because life shouldn't be

filled with ennui

After all

you're much more

beautiful

when you're free

Author's Note

Didn't do too much editing from the original, so let me know how ya feel.

Reviews

[h d e rushin]

while I'm writing this I am but-naked. (But that is the fallacy of the internet.)
The message here is tremendous. You cant marvel at the stuff of prophetic indication or
significance because happenstance will change all perception, even that which foreshadows
a coming event.

One my first few hours hours of book camp, every recruit was given a bald head, a battery of
shots, had his teeth checked out and saw the doctor and all while completely naked.
Because when you are naked there is no bragging, no compitition, no condescendence and
no conversations.

Interesting write sir.. and forgive my little navy story.....dana

[M. Stein]

I really like the message of this, and the unaltered freedom. By far one of my favourite reads. xx

[A. Smith]

simple and straight to the point

[Dr. Wood ?]

pretty good is what I thought sir

We were born that way

I believe, and always will in openness So I suppose that's the next best thing

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write...

[SyberRose]

I know my feet is always naked...I hate shoes...and I don't wear pantyhose...I like to breathe...Im getting ready to burn my bra haa...i will be naked soon...and then I can join a nudist colony...Rose

[Angi]

I have only ever been truly naked a very few times. It is amazing how deep you can breathe when you can strip it all away. Nicely done, Jabberwock! Angi~

[luviva]

this is a gripping read.
at first glance i thought ohh yeh baby
another one of *nature*
it is a great poem which is relayed in a simplistic way which can be understood in many ways.
the becoming naked could be you leaving your old ways n all.......
nice write!!

[chandlerl]

This can be taken on two different levels. It can be taken as the litteral one and in the metaphorical one. Being able to be yourself, naked in the eyes of another, vunerable. While also being comfortable with yourself enough to do it. It's hard to be able to find someone you can trust enough to do that. Esspecially when your beliefs are different from what society deems is okay. Much like, being naked.

It's late and my thoughts are scattered in a million directions. I may have taken the metaphorical point of this poem too far, but that's what I get out of it. And it is a beautiful poem.

[Kris]

The shackles and chains of society's rules and morals are the only thing that cover us from true 'nakedness' (freedom). Wonderful piece, well penned. Thank you for sharing this!

[The_Jabberwock]

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it =]