Innocence Lost

What does not kill you makes you stronger.

Innocent eyes filled with tears

She cried and her innocence washed away.

Now a cynic she believes in none.

Broken carriage with a passenger of only one.

She rides in the cold windy roads

To an endless night her path unfolds.

 

The chilling wind cuts her skin

Bleeding charred skin from the outside 

Just like her heart on the inside.

Reaching on the highest cliff.

She drops the anvil of her.

Now there is nothing she fears.

As she sheds her old, dried sins

At long last the sun rises.

And she is the one who wins.

Author's Note

Reviews are welcome.

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

A shattered girl who turns into a temporary cynic and eventually surpasses all turmoil to emerge as someone different, no longer a cynic, happy, now. Wondrous tale of a girl coming to terms with herself and "shedding" her old self away, a pursuit of happiness, in some way. Well done.

[New Theory]

Thank you TR. Indeed a pursuit to happiness.

[anne]

So inspirational......loved it......so beautifully described......I would like to read it two,three times more..........

[New Theory]

Thank you Anne :) . I am glad you liked it :)

[Amal N]

"Broken carriage with a passenger of only one."
Very well written and very touching, loved it :)

[New Theory]

Thank you Amal N :).

[Akansha]

Amazingly written...a very touching piece of writing!!!

[New Theory]

Thank you Akansha :)

[Cristina]

This poem exactly captured my mood lately. Oh I wish the sun rises for all the bleeding hearts! Wonderful work!

[New Theory]

Thank you Christina :)

[Shaquana Adams]

This is a powerful and unique write. Very inspiring! I enjoyed very much! :)
-QuanaWana

[New Theory]

Shaquana, Thanks for the review :)

[UC Poika]

I get the story but I don't really understand how she became a snake in the end. Interesting write!

[New Theory]

Dude you made my day. Lol. She sheds her sins not skins. Her sin being holding on to her past mistakes. She now is free and ready to face the world. Now wiser. :). Thanks for the review.

[UC Poika]

I see it. Good job.

[New Theory]

:).... :0..... :D

[UC Poika]

What I saw was not the tragic struggle like everyone else though I did see that too. I saw her shedding her sin like a snake sheds its skin. She's the victor. The skin is left behind, and so is the sin. I'm sorry I guess I let my imagination run a bit there. But I really did enjoy the poem. I confess I didn't understand it completely, but its mystery was wonderful in my eye. I do hope you are not upset because of the way it went with me. Obviously on this one I had a different interpretation, which must reflect more on me than the poem. Sorry if I upset or confused you in any way. UC

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes life bruises and batters you and you fall time and time again and have to be strong and pick yourself up and keep going.This is a wonderful if sad poem Theory :)

[New Theory]

Thank Vidya :). Life puts many hurdles but finally we overcome it. :). Its difficult not to rise from adversities .

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Bluefire]

This is a very uniquely played tale.
I've never seen anything quite like it before.
Well done. ^^
~*~
"The chilling wind cuts her skin
Bleeding charred skin from the outside
Just like her heart on the inside."

If it were me, it would have went a little something like this,

"The chilling wind cuts her skin
Bleeding and charred
From the outside in."
~*~
But it's not me, so... :P

[New Theory]

Thanks BlueFire :). Everyone has their own way of putting words together and that's what makes them unique. :)

[Bluefire]

You're welcome. ^^

[Anita Singh]

It is never too late to overcome our setbacks. Amazing write. :)

[New Theory]

Thanks Anna, :). We shall rise from our adversities.