Dead inside

.. dead  inside of suicide

destiny's from outside

longing eyes like cold silver

flame stars in a timeless river...

https://www.artmajeur.com/nick-fatum/en/artworks/18546193/the-trap

Reviews

[Sam Daniel]

Hi! In addition to the wonderful minimalistically figurative text about the realization of the hopeless fatality of the time of being flowing like a river, I really liked the associative coincidence with the image below, sad and fatalistic - respect to the author!

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment and appreciation!

[Sam Daniel]

You're welcome, I just like it.

[Nick Fatum]

Good luck in everything. 🤝

[Sam Daniel]

You too, I really like it.

[Tina Fly]

It's a rare gift to rhyme so figuratively, compressing so many meanings into a small volume... love it.. really.. deep poetry.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your appreciation!

[Tina Fly]

You're welcome!

[Nick Fatum]

Have a nice day, Tina!

[Tina Fly]

Good luck in the creativity.

[Nick Fatum]

.....🤝....

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Ah ... analogy, metaphor, and lacking context, the "human" mind fills in the missing pieces of its own choosing. In kind we reflect ... should we, could we, must we classify this snippet of literary DNA? It's no longer sufficient to mull about, begging for sustenance and hope for pity - that is in short supply in this age. No, it's better to lie at places in the subway where it's impossible not to trip over the body of experience that is the poetic vessel. At least, there may be, with luck, a tumble or accident that will evoke something in the way of an acknowledgement of this thing that interacts with our own existence. Make of it what you will. At least we have the meager satisfaction that the event provokes.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for the comment.

[LadyNaida]

Somber, yet deep in little words. Thanks for sharing your gift.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment. 🤝

[Pete]

doesn't take many words to say a lot. deep and powerfully said with the just the right words and imagery. speaks to the emptiness. fantastic imagery and feeling. well done.

[Nick Fatum]

Really thank you for the appreciation!🤝

[Lisasview]

Deep meaning poems resonate with me.
Although this is a rather sad tale it is still a realistic view into our lives...especially as we get older.
Lisasview

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your appreciation!🤝

[Lisasview]

You are most welcome. I believes true reviews are the best.
Lisasview

[Nick Fatum]

Really.. thank you!

[Zombified Spider]

That made me feel even happier that I'm in therapy

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your appreciation!

[redd Brick Keshner]

haunting flow— poignant ache
riverine depths reflect quiet light.
cold reflective sliver

[Nick Fatum]

Nice)! Thank you!

[emmajoygreen]

I've read this twice as it stands then, wandering the words end to beginning because seems to me both mind and body is searching for its rightful place 'in a timless river.' Perhaps.

Body being dismembered as if responsible for thought fading? Perhaps.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your interpretation, I usually don't explain or comment on what I've done).. but the individual train of thought of those who have become interested in my work is really important to me.. Thank you!

[emmajoygreen]

I can't and don't aim to read a poet's mind but the way his or her words touch mine and occasionally, my heart. You're welcome.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you so much anyway 🤝

[emmajoygreen]

Repeated smiles because one isn't enough according to this box's demand!

[Nick Fatum]

Alas, the box requires overly detailed answers..

[emmajoygreen]

That's life in one brief prase.

[Nick Fatum]

That's for sure)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I gravitate to brevity in a poem. I find it speaks volumes. Wasn't it Shakespeare who said that brevity is the soul of wit? Nice to meet you, Nick!

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for the comment, glad to meet you, Kelly!
🤝

[James Reed]

This poem evokes beautiful and dark images.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment!

[James Reed]

Good luck in the creativity.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you James.

[Jessica F.]

So deep, dark.. depressive. I love it.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment!