Dead inside

.. dead  inside of suicide

destiny's from outside

longing eyes like cold silver

flame stars in a timeless river...

https://www.artmajeur.com/nick-fatum/en/artworks/18546193/the-trap

Author's Note

fatalism (internal and external) "Dead inside of suicide": not a physical act, but a state of despair. «Destiny's from outside»: fate is an external, ruthless force, a human being is an object that destiny is pressing down on, unable to resist it. the coldness of contemplation ("Longing eyes like cold silver") the image of eyes like cold silver speaks of the detachment of those who look at the world with longing (longing), the gaze is devoid of warmth, silver is a cold and mirrored metal; the character only reflects a reality in which he has no place, eternity against the moment ("Flame stars in a timeless river") — "flaming stars in a timeless river" is a metaphor for space, the river of time: "timeless" (timeless), infinite, stars: sparks of creativity that burn brightly, but float in the stream of oblivion, where a person is just a flash (star), between inner emptiness and outer fate.

Reviews

[Sam Daniel]

Hi! In addition to the wonderful minimalistically figurative text about the realization of the hopeless fatality of the time of being flowing like a river, I really liked the associative coincidence with the image below, sad and fatalistic - respect to the author!

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment and appreciation!

[Sam Daniel]

You're welcome, I just like it.

[Nick Fatum]

Good luck in everything. 🤝

[Sam Daniel]

You too, I really like it.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A good exercise in poetic impressionism. Very nice.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your appreciation!

[Betty Hermelee]

I think there is much hope in this Brevity poem...Each of has a destiny, different from each other...longing to live life as preferred....no suicide here...only what joy life brings to each of us.....
Warmly, B

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you so much for your comment!🤝

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome!😊
Warmly
B🌷

[Nick Fatum]

Good luck in Everything🤝

[Sam Daniel]

The deep poem with many meanings..

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment.

[Arundass TP]

Confusing poem. I am thinking

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for the comment.

[Ken e Bujold]

impressive abstraction. Obviously, with such work there is no singular point of view, but for what it's worth i read the poem as a celebration of life.

enjoyed my introduction to your work

ken

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your appreciation!🤝

[Chris]

Here, it's just after 6 AM - so you know the level of my intent to BE, hear, and to read and think on your thoughts.
...And my own.

"...Is It Telling..." (when one speaks of THEIR perceptions of another's thoughts?)

Each line,
framed...
introspection
of moments - pausing -
behind my eyes,
as coffee's steam
...chills...
while expanding to transparency.

Do YOU understand
the whys
I think I - do?

Chris

I also paused with your posted art. Wished I had the money - not to own - but to add such glimpses back into my existence. I guess this says it all toward my perceptions of of your efforts.

Was a good morning, thank you.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment.

[Chris]

No sir, It's thank you ...for expressing your thoughts in ways (both visual and oral) that hold my attention and give me perceptions that even I want to share - with you and others. Again, thank you.

[Nick Fatum]

I'm really glad! Have a nice day.🤝

[James Reed]

A deep philosophy of doom, something reminded me
of a medieval Nordic saga, just cool.

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment!

[Tina Fly]

It's detached, cold, and at the same time very tragic, beautifully rhythmic, and besides, the text completely matches the wonderful image - thank you for this post!

[Nick Fatum]

Really thank you,Tina!

[Jessica F.]

Just cool! So sad fatal, love it!

[Nick Fatum]

Thank you for your comment!