Why...

Why do I feel so sad ?

Moody and a little bit down

Feeling a little bit empty

A feeling that keeps coming around...

Why do I feel so lonely ?

In this little heart of mine

Why on earth do I feel this way ?

Reasons I keep trying to find...

Why do I crave closeness ?

From Someone, something, somewhere

For there's so many people around me

But not one even seems to care...

Author's Note

chivalry is officially dead....

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

@ author's note: shuh, yeah it is...This is such a melancholy piece...I'm depressed as hell right now ;-p I'm going to go find something to cheer me up. Oh look ----> A Kinky Kind Of Love xD I'll meet you over there ;-)

[N!LoC]

hahahahah .... and T H A N K Y O U kimmy ! (there i said it !!!)

[KAOlmsted]

;-p yeah but you called me kimmy...if THAT ever happens again you and I are going to the woodshed ;-)

My pleasure, baby...always :-x

[anamezic]

I understand your emotion, but its stated so blatantly. I don't have space to go deep into this poem, because everything is splayed out on the surface. I think a denser vocabulary and use of literary devices such as metaphor and allusion would do you good.

[N!LoC]

you know what? i always try to dive into metaphors and underlying meanings.. but then i get a brain freeze and forgot what exactly i was writing about in the first place... so i guess i just write what comes naturally to me even if that means just me wading in a shallow dipping pool... :-P

[Butch Decatoria]

I feel you... I get it.

[N!LoC]

thanks fluffy :-)

[Baby Ricochet]

You need a boy friend bro. That's obvious. Cute poem. It's got N!LoC written all over it and that's a beautiful thing.

[N!LoC]

ah... ahah.... lol...hahahah....

[Winchester Saltgunner]

It seems as if u have a lot going on now anything u wanna talk about just message me I'm here for you anyways beautifully pain filled piece

[N!LoC]

oh thanks schitzo... thats really nice of you... :-)

[Winchester Saltgunner]

Welcome bunny Hun :)

[Deron Alexis]

the feeling of invisibility really well brought out in your poem well brought out in your poem the way the persona longs and longs but you get the feeling he will never get his wish truly a deep piece of writing keep it up

[N!LoC]

thank u deron... (huge smile on my face now) hihi

[KeeD]

Finally after so long I get to read a N!LoC poem :D
This is exactly the way I feel and you've expressed my emotions in words.. Reading at first is scary because its quiet a wake up call, shock factor.. omg there are other people who feel this way too.. and who are in a similar situation. Your writing is so honest and genuine. God bless brother, great job!

[N!LoC]

im glad u can relate... and im glad u feel me ... thanks keegs :-)

[Frieda P]

So much loneliness felt in this one N, we can feel most alone when in a crowd of people who we don't relate to...nicely pen'd. Keep your chin up my friend.

[N!LoC]

:-)

[Jonathan Biswell]

i think everyone craves companionship some just wont to admit it, but one day will come when someone will come and fill the void

[N!LoC]

I hope so Biswell.... I hope so :-)

[Jonathan Biswell]

lol dont need to call me Biswell...just call me Jonathan i have too many teacher calling me that

[N!LoC]

u do realize your actual profile name is spelled JOANthan right?

[Jonathan Biswell]

lol my hands are faster then my brain when i type