Your Face Crack

Scales, fall from my eyes,

I see through your lies.

 

Fog, clears from my head,

Fleeing the words you never said.

 

Love, shed from my heart,

On a glimpse of your chart.

 

Trust, now a frail rope,

Unwound all my hope.

 

Bewitched by your voodoo,

I believed everything you do.

 

Unbound from your spell,

Now, that your vile magic fell.

 

I watch your face crack,

As your mask falls back:

Only a stranger within,

A façade, I believed in!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[vspjaguar]

Hi Nisha,

I really like your piece.You beautifully described how the mask of the hypocrite cracked and how you could see right through him( I just assumed its a him). I just felt that the word 'chart' didn't fit in the flow of the poem. Other than that wonderful writing.Thanks for the share.

[The Dreamer]

thank you for the review :) by chart what i meant was 'plans' - n then again it can be interpreted as 'true intention' ie a glimpse of his real intentions...

[vspjaguar]

hmmm alright then! I was reading with a flow and then stopped at that point.I just found that to be weird.But it seems ok now. :)

[The Dreamer]

:) thanks for pointing it out anyway :D

[Vertigoingnowhere]

Oh My Gosh! i love this! This is golden my dear! Keep Writing! You have talent!
Mind checking out some of my stuff? Thanks
~High School

[The Dreamer]

thank you hannah :) - sure i would!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

Thanks :). Really though. You are a wondeful writer. ;)
~High School

[Abhishekizy]

This is your most powerful work till date in my diaries. Its a knot of desperation....a love child of fading enigma and realism called betrayal. Your imagination of love is in certain way, perfect as I would like to see in a girl/ my girl or any girl. Could you do me a favor dear..... Can you create an epic poem relating to a one-sided love. This is your forte and you are the Queen. As I said before, i don't like feelings called Love & pain, so come on, be sport, create something, I'd fall in love it. Get me soft and down on my knees.

[floralhorror]

You use quite a simple rhyming scheme that adds to the overall emotion of the poem
Wonderful!

[The Dreamer]

glad you like it :D

[btopasna]

i love your style of writing. great job.

[The Dreamer]

thanks :)

[being me]

ummm...i feel like i know what you meant...beneath those lines lie hurt and pain...when the mask falls off its like you regret having once trusted that person....

[The Dreamer]

true. glad you could understand. thank you:)

[being me]

:)

[Michael Stevens]

Powerful poem; people aren't always what they seem!

[The Dreamer]

nope they NEVER are! thanks :)

[rnuff]

wow, loved that last stanza so much, there is truth in this write.
Amazing write, powerful!!!

[The Dreamer]

thank you :)

[PoeticVandal]

Could be the sequel to your poem 'unrequited love'..
Finally free of feelings to the man cause now you see his perfect mask break..
Beautiful

[The Dreamer]

you are right! i never thought of that! :P yea they do fit together very well. thanks a lot :)