The End.

Labored breathing growing softer in her ear,
Mother Nature can no longer thrive here,
Battered lands to which blame is only our own,
She sheds one last tear and life turns to stone.

Reviews

[free-writer]

I really actually love this! It's short but so powerful. I like the idea and the flow and feel as I read this. I like your word choices, you've picked appropriately powerful descriptive words so you can keep it short but still display a strong image. I particularly like the 'battered' and 'sheds' word choices. This is great! More like this!!

[Chewing Wildflowers]

Thank you so much!! Your positivity means a lot!😊😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

wow wow wow
thanks for this profound piece and entering into 5 lines and under with meaning comp
goodluck this is wonderful

[ElizaB]

You behold such power. This is eco-poetry at its finest!
I can feel the gentle dim on her (natures) breathing - much like you - and I wonder when those around us will realise the damage they are inflicting upon something that was once a place of beauty. Unfortunately, those who have power in any situation will often use it to benefit themselves... in this case, it is our planet that must suffer. I am glad that you can also hear it, even if her plea is fading.

Thank you for this :)

Eliza

[Gejodi]

As i said in other posts sometimes less is more! Great topic short and to the point good choice of words sadly this wont fall on the necessary ears until perhaps all is gone and it can no longer be tolerated....good job!

[Sunburn]

Important write. And rhyming makes it more sincere too. We are losing our mother earth, and the tragedy is that we aren't doing much to save her despite knowing that she's dying.

It won't be too far away when your last line will become true...

Very well written, specially keeping a rhyming pattern...

[Justin]

that was very powerful in a short form!!!!amazing job!!!

[Chewing Wildflowers]

Thank you very much!😁

[Justin]

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