Defiance

Freewrite of the topic: Bones you couldn't break

I am sitting here all alone
looking out over the valley
of dawn's beginning
I'm still here,
a fact that amazes me.
I managed to do
the one thing
that made you more angry
then any other.
I am still here!

When you tried to stop me,
to quash my thirst of creativity,
to halt my pen,
I came back
stronger then ever.
I am the one that defied you
I am the one that told you
I would do it!
I would follow my dream
and my talents
as you never did.

Never will I allow my heart
to be stepped on, never again.

I am the paper you couldn't burn,
I am the soul you couldn't eat,
I am the bones you could never break!

Long after you have gone,
I shall remain,
because I am not one to be taunted.
I will survive you!

Reviews

[emmah]

the resilience of the narrator's spirit...the bone chilling fight, the denial of being denied, the resounding response to the calling of the soul.....it's a tale (one that i can almost relate to, as a reader) of the narrator's struggle, strength, spirit and spirituality....it's a tale of unparalleled courage....it's an irrevocable stand, a promise one makes to oneself when the darkness is darker than the midnight sky, of a dawn that will be multi-hued and full of promise.
it's a verse that gives hope in a bleak hour, a verse that can be a ray of light in a dark dungeon!
stunning!

[Wolf Cub]

good write, i love how its like you are telling someone this, like your fighting back :)

[suraj]

this is mindblowing .. i absolutely loved it .. ! not only was the direction of this piece extremely positive, the writing had almost a sense of conviction in it which really came across to me .. well done .. keep up the good work :)

[Dawn Jones]

A-FREAKIN-MEN!!!!

I will survive!
I am still here!
I love it. :)

Although I refuse to stay.
The one who will be hurt most by my abandonment of THIS location is the one who caused me to leave. So, I will run from here, but I will succeed. I will become what I aspire to and that will always be BETTER than she.

I really liked this.
Thank you... and I'm sorry it took so long for me to get to it.

[misha]

You did a great job. I am only 13 and I want to become a great poet and writer. I look up to people with the ability to mak such a peice make us feel what you were feeling. Great job