The Keeper's Heart

The Keeper guards the treasure that rest on the top of Mt. Turmoil. Only the worthy can obtain the treasure

Once, a man held a treasure
Long enough to be desired
For in it, he had pleasure
Something, he longed to acquire

Reclaimed, was the treasure
By the Keeper, retaken
To be guarded by her 
Until retook or forsaken

In a temple it rested 
Situated on Mt. Turmoil 
A mountain, trials infested
To prevent the despoil
Of the treasure contested

At the mercy of Mt. Turmoil, lies
Contestants, seeking the treasure
By the trials, dies
impure hearts, Mt. Turmoil’s displeasure

Mt. Turmoil’s mercy, found
A man of pure heart
his heart was made sound, by 
love profound

A passageway opened, to
This man of pure heart
For the mountain knew
The Keeper would impart
To this man, Her heart

Reviews

[Sophy Freebirds]

what an interesting way to give this message.Easy come easy go!! so we all nee tp work hard and hard to achieve that gift of success.. The bonding of turmoil and the man of pure heart really caught me off guard.. That was indeed very clever. :) *keep writing*

~Sophy

[Stephen]

Thanks again friend! I appreciate you reading my stuff, and thanks again for the feedback and encouragement

[Matching Socks]

Really enjoyed this. :)
Nothing worth having comes easy!

[Stephen]

Thanks for taking the time to appraise my writing! thanks for feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)

[Tai Ryens]

You detail the exquisite difficulty that your speaker must suffer through in order to prove the purity of his heart so that he may retrieve with it the heart of someone he has seemingly longed for for quite some time. Trust, after all, is a fragile thing and it can take from weeks to months, and even years to build up completely. Well done.

[Stephen]

Thanks for the feedback, I appreiate you taking the time to read it.