Life Walks On A Tight Rope

Life is a fickle thing

Night's thoughts, brings

Horror's songs, sings

of Death's bell, it's rings

the terrible things he brings, 

the thoughts of that night, it seems......

a phantasm 

A tight rope, our life walks

over the endless darkened chasm

an imbalanced move, life balks

the chasm no longer a phantasm

My feet on the ledge of .......

my last breath!

My soul, on the edge of .......

Eternity's death! 

What lies in the darkened chasm?

I cannot fathom

only heard, is the chasm's phantasm

In the darkness, what lurks, 

waiting to consume my soul?

the fire, fueled by sinful works

for the sin is it's coal, 

that fuels the fire for the soul

for the soul must pay it's toll!

From this dream I awake!

soaked with sweat, from the Dream's hell

leaving my body to shake!

leaving the stench, soul's burning smell

Our feet on the ledge of .....

our last breath!

our soul on the edge of .....

Eternity's death!

Reviews

[Pamcocoa]

This is a fantastic poem! I liked the flow of it, it's not really a beat you hear often in poetry. Really liked it.

[Stephen]

Thank you for the review, I really appreciate it!

[s]

I personally abstain from using rhyme in case it does not work...you, on the other hand, use rhyme beautifully. Very intense poem, I like it. X

[G. H. Ivanovic]

Wonderful.
You write so well!
It is always a pleasure to read one of your poems!

[Dreamgirl23732]

The vivid description kept me hooked till the very end. This is one of the best pieces I've read so far!

[Stephen]

Thanks for the review. I appreciate you taking the time to read my writing and giving your appraisal and praise

[DoormanDan]

I have MANY things to praise about this poem, so this might be a long review. First off, your use of literary devices, rhyming, and vocabulary really make a one of a kind atmosphere for this truly wonderful piece of writing! Second off, the poem flows like a river, I could easily imagine it being a song(and I would listen to this song hundreds of times a day), and I absolutely love the lines "My feet on the ledge of my last breath! My soul, on the edge of Eternity's death!" That is perhaps one of the finest examples of poetic genius I have EVER READ! :)

[Stephen]

I really am humbled by your appraisal and your praise! thanks for taking the time and reading it and writing such a great review on it. I really to appreciate it and I am glad that you enjoyed it

[Sophy Freebirds]

I surely loved this one. I am an optimist but my works do edge a lot on dark creations.This one totally grabbed my attention from beginning.The reference of A rope and the bottomless pit... the burning of soul ,the stench-vivid imagery.Next i really liked the idea of sin being the coal of that fire... very cleverly connected.This was dark and dangerous.. totally my cup of tea :) thrilled to read it... You are versatile ... i will give you a thumbs up for that.

~Sophy

[The Black Warrior]

this is a very interesting poem... I like the imagery and the flow :D

nicely done!!

[Stephen]

Thanks! I appreciate the appraisal. I am glad that you liked it

[The Black Warrior]

You're very welcome :D

[wordman]

this is a very exciting write epps you on the eats edge

[Stephen]

Thanks for the appraisal. I am glad I was able to keep you entertained throughout the poem. That was my goal.

[wordman]

yeah,you are welcome I love short stories

[W R Stowe]

very good you commanded my attention until the end good job. I had a simular one in "Are We Alone" keeps the attention of the readert

[Stephen]

Thankyou! I appreciate your appraisal. My mind was some what working when I wrote this. I will read the poem that you have told me is similar

[W R Stowe]

not exactly a different kind of hunger

[Lizardo]

Really good piece with a dark story behind it
''only heard, is the chasm's phantasm''
that line really grabbed my atention, great work on this poem
I did enjoyed reading it