THE WORLDS BREATH IN A MINUTE

Flutter flying  night-wing scrying sky              Suits elope a round this sphere

Earths callous gallows groves                            Sweating shop dotting fears

Sings lament horrors met                                         Whistled with every step

Songbird sighs sorrow                                                 Cretin decree 'morrow

Hand tie tourniquet                                                         Hands slicken slime

Woeful whispers                                                                Wasteful offerings

Pushed along                                                                       Forging pressed

Set sullen                                                                                    Fat swelling

Surviving                                                                                            Smiling

Trying                                                                                                   Killing

Life                                                                                                           Life

 

 

 

           

                  

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Sings lament horrors met Whistled with every step
Songbird sighs sorrow Cretin decree 'morrow"
Very artistic to say the least along with a unique and great format... It is always good to experiment for new things and be creative...:)

[Souladareatease]

Thanks Sami, yeah it was just a quick dabble...though it shot many ideas I hope to use sometime if I get the patience to sit down and do it.
Thanks for the read and kind comment!!!

[Sami Khalil]

It turned out good anyway...You are welcome...:)

[quinfinn]

this is well penned, nicely metered, effectively creative and just too damned clever for mortal man....damnit! you have just raised the bar....

[Souladareatease]

Thanks for the kind words Quin much appreciated---I screwed this up...I should've gone slower to make the right side truly match the left...but it was trial and error...it sparked and idea I may use later...with more calm to me.....as for the bar raised HA it's a melting twix You can have the other

[Souladareatease]

just experimenting folks....