Thought Stars

This piece is written for the Creative Poetry Group using the following poetry prompt words... Cultivate, Novel, Rifle, Erode, Embody, Plebeian, Fantasy

Thought Stars

 

Rifle through these dust covered lights.

Thought stars in the night sky of soul.

Defenses erode; dreams whisper.

Tantalizing glimpse; hope teases…

 

Advances cultivate pain’s seed.

Nurtured, watered, weeded, night grows.

Embody empty intentions.

Joy comes at loves fleeting promise.

 

The plebeian prose turns light off.

Tear away longings; no light here.

Fantasy lives best in the mind

A novel in night’s dusty stars

Author's Note

I have never used or understood punctuation in poetry, and would appreciate any and all feedback on the matter.

Reviews

[Jack...]

I found this to be extremely beautiful and peaceful. A calmness found me as I read this piece. You did a wonderful job and the subject matter is spellbinding. As far as the use of puncuation, I think to each his or her own. I don't use to much, but then again I do. Do I sound confused? Perhaps I am since my mind is still wrapped around your beautiful poem.

[Veronica Chandler]

Oh my goodness you honor me with your kind and generous words! I also must say I appreciate your comment on the punctuation thing. I am not an educated writer, but writing is as important as breathing and drinking water to me. Part of me knows the importance of structure, but I have never looked at my work through the light of such things. Merely catharsis, release, and compulsion. Thank you so much Jack!

[Jack...]

Anytime Veronica and remember, the first rule of writing is be yourself. Learn as you go and develope whatever style feels best to you. You are very gifted and it is I who am honored to have read your work.

[Veronica Chandler]

Thanx... beaming light through my eyes!

[Chris]

I've always wandered the - stars and wondered of other's perceptions. I liked the view...

[Chris]

When I breathe -
should you?
...or would you rather
think -
about it,
and decide as ...you see fit?

But
being breathless - can be sooooooooo
...enchanting,
especially when
your eyes are laughing so.

Chris

this was toward the punctuation thing.

[Veronica Chandler]

I get it now...finally...now I understand!
I will breathe and or be breathless without a thought
Spoken in a language I understand it now makes sense
Thank you Chris

[Chris]

Poetry is an Oral Art... but how and what we hear is limited to how our minds find their own "voice". Few ever hear the Poet - they hear themselves.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is beautiful with a floating feathery feeling. Drifting upon fantasy in the night. The last line is my favorite.

[Veronica Chandler]

Your words soothe...Thank you Poetic Beauty

[Poetic Beauty]

You are more than welcome. This piece took me away on wings of the night and let me just float.

[emmajoy]

' Fantasy lives best in the mind ~ A novel in night’s dusty stars '

Perhaps having a fear of writing is what more of us should have.. if your example of writing is anything to come by. This really is so descriptively colourful, takes a reader way off the grey straight path into something wondrous. As to punctuation, do what you feel is YOU .. write your words, read them aloud, see where you give a natural pause then create your lines accordingly .. works for me ( just now and again!! )

[Veronica Chandler]

Your comments are very helpful and comforting. I have received counsel on writing in hopes to become a more effective poet and while helpful it has me even more shy about sharing my writing and just plain super critical of my own work. It seems when I am spontaneous and don't follow rules people respond favorably to my work. To create this piece I did use a meter. Thank you again Emma...

[Hayley]

Haha, punctuation in poetry... think of it as just a sentence, a paragraph... either way you do a marvelous job with imagery and the flow. Pleasure to read you again :)

[Veronica Chandler]

Thank you Hayley, Right back to you! It has been far too long since I have written publicly. I always appreciate your reviews and reading your work.

[Sami Khalil]

Fantasy lives best in the mind

A novel in night’s dusty stars.
A fanciful read and very enjoyable...:)

[Veronica Chandler]

I appreciate your very kind review...Thank You ever so much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. My pleasuere...:)

[Holly Mason]

with the class factors you had to use you have done a splendid job
very nice writing thought stars creative way to think truly
title drew me right in
thank you for sharing

[Veronica Chandler]

I sincerely appreciate your comments; I have always had a fear of writing. Putting my writing here on the cafe' has been the most terrifying yet the most productive of good thing I have ever done.