Deep Dark Destiny Poem

The tears in my eyes start to swell

I refuse to sleep

 

When the day light comes

I have to go.

But tonight I'll hold you close

When the day light comes I'll be on my own

I can't lose him again.

 

I must tend, to my needs

I must find out the truth.

 

I am turning into a demon

I miss him a ton

 

My humanity is slipping

They are now in control

 

I am disappearing.

Evil is filling my veins

All I knew is now at stake.

 

Please return

For you are the only one who can save me

My prince.

Author's Note

I won't reveal who the green person is. That is yours to predict. New character or an old one!
I'm getting pshyced about the second book because the characters you know and love will change!!
Oh and one of the stanza's is part of a song! because that song is sooo part of a chapter. It revoles around the whole thing that happens in the chapter.

Reviews

[Zachary_James]

I have no idea, who the green is at all but i am wanting to know, a fabulous way to start of the book.

[The Fallen]

Oh thank you :D

[Horizon K.]

Oh... A shade prince perhaps? Or Silas becomes a shade... My guesses.

[Dark Rider]

Very nice. Now I am curious about what is going on with this book. :)

[Westminster Abbey]

The second stanza reminds me so much of Daylight by Maroon Five...

[The Fallen]

xD Thats cause it is!!! It's the song I have for Someone and Destiny!! I was listening to that song when I wrote this

[Westminster Abbey]

I LOVE that song! Ps. Don't tell me anything, because I'm still reading your first book and it might take awhile because I have a lot of school stuff right now :(

[The Fallen]

I do to!!! and xD I won't If I had stuff to say I'd ruin all the books for everyone so my mouth is shut!

[Dominique]

OMG!!!! Its Ash!!!! I was sooo right!

[The Fallen]

o.o Who said it is Ash?

[Darkening Shadow]

VERY mysterious!
Great Job!
=P

[Felicity's Eve]

I bet the green one is Dawn cuz you told me that she was a minor character with a big role! :D

I'm already really excited for this!!! ^^

[The Fallen]

Oh Dawn she will be back I can assure you of that. Read the next chapter!1

[Felicity's Eve]

I just did! :)

[Lozzie]

THIS IS GOING TO AMAZING!!!! I cannot wait to find out who the green one is!!

[The Fallen]

LOL

[Bella Luna]

Soo good!!!! I can't wait to see who it is! Love the poem so much!!!

[The Fallen]

Aha thnx

[The Invisible Girl]

Amazing!! I need to know who the green is!! You better post the first chapter of the second book tomorrow, please!! :)

[The Fallen]

xD I'll consider it

[Bella Luna]

I agree :)

[The Invisible Girl]

You should because I didn't say to post it tonight! ;)

[The Fallen]

-Sigh- I'm in a bad mood. So unless you can convince me to post it tomorrow it probably won't happen

[The Invisible Girl]

A bad mood!? Why is that? You need to turn that frown :( upside down! :) lol

[The Fallen]

Reasons...It's gotta do with the book though -.-

[The Invisible Girl]

ohhh..if I'm bugging you too much on posting the next chapter..I'm sorry! Take all the time you need!

[The Fallen]

No it isnt you. The next chapter I can easily post it's done. It's whether I am going to post it or if I'm going to dump the book..Someone has got me unsure about my book now.

[The Invisible Girl]

You better not dump it!! Tell me who is getting you unsure about your book and I will personally find them and egg their house! lol :P

[The Fallen]

I cant tell you..And why can't I dump it? I finished the first one for you guys and myself but now the second book hasn't started so I could dump it without anyone caring since I haven't kept you hanging..

[Bella Luna]

I agree, don't dump your book! You are such a talented writer and I absolutely love following this story! It's one of those stories you keep thinking about even after you're done reading. I will be so sad if it ends :(

[The Fallen]

it's not that good ... They have gotten in my head and basically made me feel like it's a bad book...They said Destiny sucks to...Made fun of part of me basically..

[The Invisible Girl]

Why? Do I know the writer?? O.o And Bella Luna is right your are a talented writer! :) Don't give up! We are here to support you!

[The Invisible Girl]

Never let anyone bring you down!!! Maybe the person is jealous that you are better writer than her/him! :)

[The Fallen]

Beats me if you do..It's possible.. Thanks.. but seriously one person says that my book is something I cant say on here but in message maybe..and it get's in my head..

[The Fallen]

AHA Me a better writer then her Please! I'll tell you what she said in a message if you wanna know

[Bella Luna]

Either way it's totally your decision, but we love your writing and Destiny is a great character! There's always going to be haters, but don't let them destroy something you love. Whatever you chose, we still love your story :)

[The Invisible Girl]

Okay. I'm telling you she is probably jealous!

[The Invisible Girl]

I agree with Bella Luna! :)

[The Fallen]

Thats what I thought at first :/

[The Invisible Girl]

I'm serious! She has to be. Cause there is nothing wrong with your characters! And the plot of your book is great! It keeps us readers wanting to know what happen next. But its your decision, but if you do drop the book you are just letting her win. Thats what she wants to do. Get in your head so you can stop your book.

[The Fallen]

>.< I messaged you so you get the jist of what I'm thinking right now.

[Bella Luna]

I agree. Just look at all the reviews you got! There are so many people who love the book! And we are all excited for what you will write next. Just don't let this person ruin it for you. It's a fabulous story with fantastic characters.

[The Invisible Girl]

I just read the message and sent you a new one. And I totally agree with Bella Luna.

[Lozzie]

Okay so i just read all of this and i am devistated! You CANNOT drop this book!!! I will literally die! The way you have written the characters has like.. entranced me... i must know what happens!!! When i was on another writing site it was such a strain to keep readin the book because they dawdled and didn't hook to reader but ayou are such a talented writer! I feel as though i took the journey with Destiny... i was, and still am, entranced by your writing and your books! I cannot force you to write the rest of this series, i can recomend it, but i cannot force you. All i want to say is you have written an amazing book and i doubt i will forget the story or the characters and only a couple books have actualy done that to me and, trust me, i am a serious book worm... This is probably a really long message... i cant see but it must be long... I just wanna say
1. Well done on an amazing book
2. I seriously recomend for you to keep going with it
3. whoever told you those lies about it not being the most amazing freaking book in the freaking univers is an F**king B**ch
4. Thank you for letting me read it :)
5. I think thats it...

Well done! If you do write this... I AM DEFFINATELY READING IT!!! And I already know I will love it SO much!!! If you publish it tell me and i will buy it :)

Lots of hugs and good wishes
Laura :)

p.s. Deconstuctive critisism isn't worth your time honey :)

[Lozzie]

yep thats my essay :)

[The Fallen]

O.O 1. nice essay xD
2. I'll keep going only cause without Destiny I'd probably die.. and because of you guys :P
3. Thank you for thinking I'm talented!!!
4.I'm a book worm to lol!!!! And I know what you mean by only some books can do that to you
5.OMG YOU WOULD ACTUALLY BUY MY BOOK. I think I can totally do better..I could sutograph it then send you it lol. That is if it does get published.
6. Oh I know. Only one person has ever said anything to me like that...I do not like it..

Thank you -Olivia

[Lozzie]

You are welcome :) I can understand why you would decide to stop writing cause i know that me writing literally depends on reveiws... If i don't get reviews I think i'm s**t and I stop writing... and then i go insane with no creative outlook :P But i am glad you have decided to keep going :)

[Bella Luna]

Agreed :)

[The Fallen]

Yeah for me it's the reviews to, If people don't seem like they like it I stop it like the six warriors and the other ones they all ended.
I only decided to keep going cause of you guys. I mean you showed me that you like my book and it means alot to me! and Destiny is probably happy as well lol

[The Invisible Girl]

Agreed!! :)

[Lozzie]

:) I'm glad we can help you :) I'd say good luck but you won't need it :)

[The Fallen]

xD thanks