Behind The Wheel

This road I'm on is like the others before.
It has tar, pebbles, dirt, and snow;
curving all which ways to go
wherever I decide.

Round n round the mountain slopes
and through the country side,
beautiful things adorn my gaze   as
my road is the path I wish to go,
but only if I bid it so.

We pick the roads we take in life
from round-abouts to hard made rights.
A road can be of piercing shards
that, in place will make you stay,
or of silky smooth crete
made to guide you on your way.

Your road is the path you wish to go
but only if you bid it so.

Reviews

[Insight "MH"]

So many roads to choose from, but at the end, one road it will be. Nicely written poem.

[Chase]

Thank you very much, Insight.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This is a very good poem once again, a road is a good way to describe life.
As when in a car on the road, you make decisions as in which path to take, you do that In real life as well.
I like how this poem started off being about you driving on the road, and turned around into being about life.
Wonderful cleaver well written poem.

[Chase]

Thank you very much Cimmy. I really appreciate the specific feedback on what you liked in this piece :) it was a very spontaneous poem that i thought out while actually driving. The transition from real life to hypothetical roads was something i wasnt sure worked but you've confirmed that it does. Thank you.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome anytime :)
I thought it was an excellent idea, and a great way to relate to life :)

[Babypax]

The way you worded it was amazing. Made me feel like i was on those roads and even took me back to roads that reminded me of being a young kid.

[Chase]

Im very glad that you enjoyed this piece and that you were able to get something out of it.

[Carolynn]

Point well taken with your words in this one - we definitely choose our own path - hopefully it's a pleasant journey :)

[Chase]

I feel like the journey is as pleasant as we allow it to be, in general ways! The little things iron themselves out over time (:

[Natasha]

The third stanza is my favorite and stands out to me the most. I liked the vocabulary you used in that part. I also thought it was clever that you repeated that one sentence again but changed it from your road to my road. No critiscm really on this. Just a really nice poem.

[Chase]

Thank you Scrib. I appreciate the feedback. I don't often utilize repetition, but i definitely need to incorporate it more in my work. It can have a powerful effect. Thanks for the feedback.