a day in the life of a privateer

reader beware for your life is at stake

cutlasses flash as ships clash my blood stained clothes mould around my body. my cutlass stops as i feel it cuts through my duelers neck. the jolly roger flies mightaly beside us as we forge a gap through their attack. we reach the deck of the other ship closer to the treaure each step we take. but for each step we take we loose our breath for we are dieing by the dozen.then a cannon blastes and our ship drops a metre the boarding ladder break off. we fight for our lives as our ship sinks along with our hopes but with that comes revenge. WE WILL NOT DIE my best mate yells i return with a cheer and a vicious battle charge as two more men fall prey to my cutlass. we have won he yells again as a pain in my shoulder sprouts spreading through my body i fall to my knees and look out at the horizon to see the jolly roger flying with might!

 

Author's Note

ignore all grammar problems

Reviews

[victoriamaggie]

it is a bit hard to understand, especially as you haven't used any paragraphing but i sorta like it.
is that your pirate poem one?
(i can't tell)
im glad you accepted me as your friend too, and i thought since you were being nice to me id better be nice back!
dont worry though, thats not the only reason why i commented!
coolio

[Bella-Marie]

Huh??? Hard to understand and I kinda agree wiv Berlin Guy but I get the gist... I like the first line. :)
Bella.

[Jenthura]

In that case I would have to be VERY ignorant. The mistakes are quite major, so you should defintily edit this before republishing. The action is good and the repetition of 'The mighty Jolly Roger' amplifies your meaning, but there are many grammatical and spelling problems to fix.