The Way You Make Me Feel

Purely descriptive poem of how he makes me feel... I think. Haha.

The Way You Make Me Feel

 

Walking with my head held high,

Talking animatedly till I am bone dry.

But when I’m with you, I just try and try,

All that comes out - a frustrated, shy sigh.

 

Glares and stares, I can do them in a snap,

In my eyes, anyone feels like lost in a trap.

But when you look at me, it only takes a clap,

Averting my blue peepers under this white cap.

 

Jesting with me, I simply counterattacked,

Laughing so hard until my voice cracked.

But when it’s with you, I always get sidetracked

Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract.

 

I used to hate the feeling of being in my school,

I just wished to sit whole day on my piano stool.

But when there were you, I banished this ground rule.

For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool.

 

Before there were you, I retire early at night.

I didn’t have thoughts of turning feelings to a write.

But when you came along, everything just felt right,

Every piece of my mind, you haunt it like a mosquito bite.

 

Author's Note

Totally random. I just described how he makes me feel, but with rhymes! HAHA. Well okay, I don't drool. =)) Enjoy and tell me what you think about it.

Awarded 'Good Love Poem ♥' in the Love Poems Contest.

Reviews

[tk]

such a sweet, innocent feel in this piece! :)
very funny and it made me remember those high school days. i used to feel like this before.. haha!
"Cause you make it feel full - my urinary tract."
"For all I want is to look at you and drool like a fool."
totally hilarious. and the rhyming scheme is awesome.
such a noteworthy write by a notable writer. keep it up.
thanks for sharing!

[Filibustero Ibarra]

I like the rhymes, the wit, and the message of this poem. Most of my poems orbit around the theme of love because it's one thing worth living for everyday. Reading the poem, I remembered the girl I like in school. Teenage love is so overpowering and it sometimes conquers me. All I can do is fall in sweet surrender. :)

[y&r]

Hahahaha, I gotta say, the final simile caught my attention. It is a very unlike simile and somewhat humorous. No one would really compare love to...a mosquito bite. :) good job tho. that caught my attention :)

[Hachamecha]

I like this! Haha drool :)

[frozensakura]

this is a really great poem, funny and i loved the rhymes.
-chole(:

[Eagle Cruagh]

You will do anything for a rhyme. """you make it feel
full----my urinary tract."""" Funnnneeeeeeee .

You are an incredible story teller, a hilarious lass and
I won`t try to make that rhyme.
I have a feeling that you are a titilating titlest, a fun
loving feline, a fellow lover of the pickled pundit .'

Keep up the good work and I love being your friend.

----- Eagle Cruagh

[natzky]

this poem of yours is really great.....heheh...that's the power of love bby gerl....:)anyway i love the way you write it seems that you're already a professional one.....

[Walk away slow poet]

Goodness you are a very talented writer, Love the rhyme scheme and flow. I really loved your last line its' wonderful and cute.

[paradise]

Aha Nice I like it alot! It really does remind me about how my certain guy friend makes me feel

[The Scholar]

Ah this one is awesome!
It's funny and sweet, and it is so real.
I read it three whole times before I could finally make my mouse click on some other link.
And I'll probly be back later too. :)