5 Day Visit

Thoughts on a visit I had during a five days of isolation.

As you looked down at me
And I lacked to retain
Her form, I, who you
Would pinch and maim
To form her figure
And taste her sugar
So, sink deeper
Into what’s at hand:
My hand, and form
Which just falls short of familiarity,
Propelled by naivety
And youthful curiosity
Did you try to wake her in me?
Women, though adaptable
Will not be yours to wish, to be.

The moment pulses and fades
Leave a bitter taste as you go
It doesn’t make me want you, no
I recall that much .

Author's Note

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Reviews

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Indeed twas amazing read! Yeah you rocked at the last stanza!
Keep up😊

[emipoemi]

"I lacked to retain" I'm not entirely sure is grammatically correct, but the poem itself is amazing! You're only eighteen, and you're writing like this!? WOW! Simply tweak that one line a bit, and this would be a gem! Well done!