desperation is my calling card

I talk to dreams

you'd talk to anything

when it's been this long

you'd beg the sun for an ear 

to bend

you'd chase the wind

to cliff's edge

just for someone to catch

your soundwave

desperation is my calling card

Reviews

[Emily B]

I would talk to you any time

[Brittany W]

So short and full of despair, the description in this poem is magnificent, great job.

[Isolophobe]

my god, in all my writing, i haven't said it better. the middle two stanzas are so f*****g brilliant.

[Brooke Wake]

Hey Paul...

Lovely first line. It sets a plaintive mood...and the final line is lovely and fresh! Very creative.

Within the poem, the third and fourth stanzas contain slightly overused phrases, like "ear to bend" and "cliff's edge", although the preceding parts of each stanza ("you'd beg the sun", etc) are solid. I would delve a little deeper to replace the generalities, and then you have a very wonderful poem!

"Just for someone to catch your soundwave" is also lyrical and surprising.

Good job!

[...]

desperation is my calling card
but i don't have a number to call
desperation is my calling card
and that's why i'm so small

so small, so small, so small i am
except in little amsterdam
there the sky is all mine
oh i forgot the next line

[ashley]

oh wow this is incredible. really great poem! :D

[Lilly]

Great poem. Lovely descriptions and this piece flows really well.

[TAO]

...crud... This is great... But now I feel weird conversing with my own thoughts... Thanx. :)

[Wondering Mind]

Sometimes, my dreams talk back to me, which I personally think is good. As to your write, an excellent expression once more in your special style of that state many of us go through.

[Michael X]

wow, such an emotional context driven to desperation, chasing wind
off a cliff, calling card of loneliness, there are many featires that bring this
poem to life with sensitivity and structure. so subtle and easy to understand
in context of the metaphor, i believe you've done a great job here, awsome.