Time Lasher

Long hours, they erase me,

Minute by minute I shed my skin

From the first eye opening to the last

One silent blast of living, I heed.

 

Time well spent, time wasted

No other matter can be so merciless,

As all it needs is a blink of its whip

Near to the exhausted head.

 

To unwind my bones, I yearn

For a vertical vision, to count up birds

And curls, crossed with grass stalks,

Then abuse the time, purposely.

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

Time is such an abstract concept and I love that. There are literally thousands of different interpretations of time but in the end its just something that we humans gave shape. For we like to invent concepts when we cannot explain the unknown but there is something that flows through out the whole universe and we call it 'time'. It flows through our veins and effect our 'lives'. I really like your poem. It is well written and it shows the world that you have talent.

Good job :D

[paulina misiewicz]

Thank you for your kind words Nightfeather. Yes well said. We give shape to abstract concepts to be able to understand world around us,and sometimes equally these concepts shape us. I am happy you liked my interpretation of 'time'. Thanks for taking the time ;) to comment!

[Nightfeather]

No problem, for your poem is super awesome and deserved a review :)

[viola]

This poem is very interesting. I'm still trying to puzzle it out. I love "Time well spent, time wasted/No other matter can be so merciless/As all it needs is a blink of its whip" But I'm having trouble with "Near to the exhausted head."
The concept of having the time to abuse the time, is also very interesting. I like that, but what are the curls you are counting? (Sorry I may be being very obtuse).
Cool thoughts.

[Robert]

Time, we have all contemplated it so much in our lives. I have written two pieces on time. Well done

[paulina misiewicz]

Thank you Robert. I shall look them up :-)

[andrew mitchell]

A lovely expressed write on how time effects us all and how we manage time!

[paulina misiewicz]

Thanks Andrew!