The Hand

Pull or put down

Bite the hand that feeds

The bullets in the chamber

One after another

My life is in danger

 

I rose with the sun

Intending to set forever

Plan undetected

Better yet all so clever

 

I walk in the shadows

Shy away from the faces

Those people they live

I walk without laces

 

Flash bright as the sun

What a bright light I see

I could not bite the hand

Instead the hand bit me

 

*pNh*

Reviews

Interwoven with a divine balance. Well done! True message to be found within the words you paint. Thank you. :)

E.L.

[Desert Dreamer]

This poem has a nervous energyl, at least to me. I feel the danger, as if life may be ending soon, and that bright flash at the end feels as if I almost met my death. I feel as if I am walking in these shoes, the bright light startled me. Well done!

[Summer D.]

First: Thank you for the review~ I really appreciate it. :)

Amazing. I just loved the turn of the metaphor, creative and definitely unique.
Definitely invoked some thoughts from me.

* 100 *

[Ruth]

Gives the reader such an impression of how much life is truly a balance! Direct and full circle...unexpected and holds such impact! xoxo

[Brianna Brie]

This one makes me think about life's unpredictablilty. Thoughtful read.

[Leslie Philibert]

A tough little poem,full of tempo.Nice to read something with a traditional rhyme structure.It works because it´s real.Good work.

[Ryan Gonzalez]

Awesome poem. The poem to me has a very quick tempo that I enjoy. In the end I like how the hand bites back instead of the one in the poem biting it. Great job!

[E.V. Black]

It bites back, something one rarely reads about. Well, maybe, but not much in literature. I love the rebellion of the hand. Things don't go the way one expects them to.

[jessicamarie19]

I absolutely love the juxtaposition of common phrases to create a new meaning/angle/viewpoint ... i.e. hand that feeds/bullets in chamber. That's what poetry's about. Good piece!