The Pain

Pain is a funny thing
It slithers through
Shaking

Emotion is a wretched thing
Halting your calm
Corrupting

It keeps coming
faster now

STOP

It's an awful thing
Please
No more

You gotta be a strong thing
Push it down
There's no time now

Reviews

[Enid Blake]

Good description, sometimes having to be strong IS such a pain ;)

[Persephone]

I agree - thank you for reading!

[Heather]

Great structure and description of pain, it can sneak up on you. Well done!

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[moo to the world]

like the structure and way the you write things is quite refreshing

[Persephone]

Thank you!

[Baby Ricochet]

Great poem Persephone. I like the structure. It reminds me of a poem I wrote a while back called "Tramp Stamp." Great Job.

[Persephone]

You're right, it is similar - great minds think alike - thanks for the review!

[B-poet]

Pain can be quite an eye opener. It hurts the worst when you don't see it coming. That's when you really don't have time to brace yourself. Great illustration of this in your poem. Nice job. :)

[Persephone]

Thank you! This one was my way of dealing with unexpected pain

[.]

Great work :)

[Persephone]

Thank you :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

One thing about pain, it lets us know we are alive and can feel... but yes it gets in the way of every day life... your words are concise and sharp. Very nice.

[Persephone]

Thank you cowboy!