my virus

this is one i wrote when i was seventeen so please pardon its generic and cliche : emo teen theme :)

you're my natural disaster 

the monster in my closet 

the thing i fear the most 

i am rigid with fear at your overwhelming presence .

i feel the melancholy disease you bring with you 

you're an epidemic to my soul .

you invaded my space 

you corrupted my system , the virus 

you planted within me is growing 

you're a disease to men .

go away you incurable pest! .

you've broken me 

this virus has corrupted my morals 

it has destroyed my cognition 

you trojaned my processors 

you crushed my rural village within 

so what is next do i pass you on to the next victim ?

Author's Note

i wrote this , after i found out this young lass was using me and cheating on me lol .

Reviews

[J'Eliot]

Its a good one. Be it you've written this at 17, the detailing is good :)

[Rhea752]

Writing is a great release. Thankfully i do not know anyone like her. This is a great poem with amazing detail. Keep writing!! :)

[Infinity Blues]

You are a kind soul, for the fact you laughed off yours ex cheating on you, not many people can do that. Keep up your morals and you will find someone who will treat you with love, and respect, just as you will to her.
I like the computer terms running through your poem, it was sort of woven in parts, and blinding in others. For an emo teen theme I would say you have done rather well for yourself.
-Infinity

[Peter H]

thank infinity blues and may i say you have an ingenious alias :)

[Infinity Blues]

Why thank you Peter H

[NebraskaHope]

I love it . great focus points and well written !

[Archangel Gabriel]

Young love and it's frailty well penned Peter.

[Peter H]

it was young harlots and their promiscuity ;)

[Archangel Gabriel]

That IS harsh. Some females are deadlier than a snake.

[lovejulez03]

"You invaded my space you corrupted my system" this was clever, as was all of it! Unfortunately I know the feeling. This poem was well written and I love your choice in words. I'm sure everyone can relate to it in some form and although it came from a bad situation I have to say that it made me smile a little because its the perfect way to describe the situation! Well done

[Peter H]

thank you julez ♥

[lovejulez03]

anytime

[Baby Ricochet]

She did ey? I've had similar fates but after I calmed down I thought "Well, at least I got to F**k her. You know, there's a reason I don't write romantic poetry. So far as the poem goes, it's kinda choppy flow wise but hey, you were young and upset, now you know better. Hang tough man

[Peter H]

seventeen baby richochet and i never got to have coitus with her which was good i found out she had one of them std's and she slept around i did go all the way to like fourth base though

[Angi]

To identify the virus is half the cure! Never waste your time on somone that isn't good for you. Life is too damn short for that! Angi~

[quinfinn]

oh man, i know this chick! seriously though, this is the perfect portrait of that disaster of liaisons....so good, and yet so, so bad. excellent!

[Peter H]

you knew her too , that s**t lol thank you for the review :)

[Sam Sin Sepultura]

very subtle lol, but seriously this is good :) I really feel connected with it